September clouds
Gather over the graying city
Ready to attack
Stinging drops
Spatter on the street, sidewalks,
And striped plastic awnings
Umbrellas appear
Sprouting like mushrooms
In the busy market-place
Black nylon shields
Against the torrential rain,
Slim liquid spears
Smash against my window-pane,
Trickling like tears
Down the dusty glass
People run for cover
Branches snap
Soon the street becomes a river
I must hasten to say You are back with a bang Good piece in the fray
First of all, thank you for asking for my opinion, a very good poem indeed! The title lays the groundwork....monsoon, anyone ever experiencing this well knows your term ready to attack is such a grand description of the upcoming onslaught coming upon a peaceful sunny day. I really like this work of yours my friend...10
Tan, you've created a perfect picture for those of us who will never experience this. Thank you.10.
A lively picture of monsoon you perfectly drew through this poem.Enjoyed a lot.
You painted a picture of a rainy season in this poem so well. I have written a similar poem on monsoon rain.
This is a striking poem with the most vivid evocation of the force of monsoon rains, something I have never experienced directly. But your images - short, sharp, precise - make the experience imaginatively alive and real. I can see myself slipping and sliding as I run for shelter, happy that the rains have broken the heat, happy to just watch nature's exciting show of force.
Black nylon shields]slim liquid spears=excellence. Great imagery throughout. Thank you for inviting me to read it.
A good poem, with vivid images. I like the way you choose the thins to highlight. All of them Are things we can see. and join you in observation. This style gives us events in time as they happen. Thanks
A poem with a perfect flow. Good build up to the downpour. Good imagery. Well written.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Sublime... the moments of raincoming are captured so beautifully with vivid imagery.. loved it. many thanks.