Dónall Dempsey

Veteran Poet - 1,546 Points (15/07/56 / Curragh Camp, Co. Kildare, Eire.)

Your Love Entering My Bloodstream Like A Slow Poision - Poem by Dónall Dempsey

Your lies
sharp as knives.

You harm my heart.

My smile is past.

Your lies
sharp as knives

I drink pain
glass after glass

trying to escape
your eyes

sharp as knives.

(I smile and pass by)

The record says
again and again

in the same cruel scratch.

Comments about Your Love Entering My Bloodstream Like A Slow Poision by Dónall Dempsey

  • (2/4/2008 10:53:00 AM)

    Maybe one has to be old enough to remember records to catch the 'bounce' of that line....caught in the same cruel scratch...to remember how a needle would play the same line over..and over...and over? Wonderful similarity of ideas, however, in the repeated hurts... (Report)Reply

    0 person liked.
    0 person did not like.
  • (1/31/2008 11:41:00 AM)

    I love the repetition of the lies/eyes and the minimum wording. I love the expression you harm my heart and your smile is past. Having the Chinese record stick on the phrase is a master touch...stuck in the same cruel scratch. The title is very violent in its description of love...gone...wrong. Just a scratch as the record jumps and the poision enters in. I like it!

    love Debbie Debs

    0 person liked.
    0 person did not like.
  • (1/31/2008 11:11:00 AM)

    Love the last two lines Donall. HG: -) xx (Report)Reply

    0 person liked.
    0 person did not like.
Read all 3 comments »

Read this poem in other languages

This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.

I would like to translate this poem »

word flags

What do you think this poem is about?

Poem Submitted: Thursday, January 31, 2008

Poem Edited: Sunday, May 18, 2008

Famous Poems

  1. Still I Rise
    Maya Angelou
  2. The Road Not Taken
    Robert Frost
  3. If You Forget Me
    Pablo Neruda
  4. Dreams
    Langston Hughes
  5. Annabel Lee
    Edgar Allan Poe
  6. If
    Rudyard Kipling
  7. Stopping By Woods On A Snowy Evening
    Robert Frost
  8. Do Not Stand At My Grave And Weep
    Mary Elizabeth Frye
  9. I Do Not Love You Except Because I Love You
    Pablo Neruda
  10. Television
    Roald Dahl
[Report Error]