poet Ashraful Musaddeq

Ashraful Musaddeq

[03] And She Was

Laughing demons were deep blue
Sky was frightened on the skyward

Scorching sunbeam marched on
The dusty yellow leafs were diffused

A sparrow was crying somewhere
Breezes were walking silently

Time was settled into the legs
Like the roots of a large tree

Nothing happened but a train left
And she was inside the train



Poem 03
Book 'Affluent Love- The Silent Killer' February 2012
Copyright Writer
Adarsha Publishers, Dhaka, Bangladesh
ISBN 978-984-8875-33-9

Poem Submitted: Monday, September 22, 2008
Poem Edited: Sunday, August 5, 2012

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  • Tamara Hanaring A Thought Mate (7/3/2009 7:05:00 PM)

    a beautiful so well written poem

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  • Abby Mackaway (6/21/2009 12:46:00 AM)

    beautiful. it sounds so lonely, and i love the section about the breeze. well done.
    With respect,
    Abby

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  • Mehta Hasmukh AmathalalMehta Hasmukh Amathalal (6/20/2009 11:26:00 AM)

    Nothing went off, a train left
    And she was into the train., , , , , ns lidw goes on with or without companion. it is real life... beautifull y said.....10

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  • Anju Addanki (6/20/2009 8:36:00 AM)

    it was a wonderful poem.what ever happens life has to go on it does not stop well done keep it up.

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  • Samanyan Lakshminarayanan (6/18/2009 9:29:00 PM)

    a life of all existence well depicted....10

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  • Pandian Angelina (6/15/2009 3:36:00 PM)

    A picture painted,
    Of an hot dry still afternoon
    Numb in limb he stands
    Watching the train pullout,
    Strokes of blue brown & black
    A sad and stricken heart & face,
    All with the brush of Poetry!
    Brought to mind so many
    Rustic stations, distant places
    And many of our own goodbyes!
    A very true picture painted
    With heart and soul and pain.
    Angel

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  • Brishti Mazumdar (6/3/2009 9:58:00 AM)

    Time was settled into the legs
    Like the roots of a large tree.

    So good lines...10+ for them...Brishti Mazumdar

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  • Raj ArumugamRaj Arumugam (6/3/2009 3:18:00 AM)

    a beautiful poem that artistically brings in color, imagery and nature into masterly effect...

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  • Karla Bardanza (5/25/2009 11:49:00 AM)

    Great lines! Beautiful work!

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  • Jasbir ChatterjeeJasbir Chatterjee (5/24/2009 5:39:00 AM)

    So much compressed into so few words! Wonderful! People come and go out of our lives, Sun rises and sets, rain falls and stops; though certain moments remain etched forever in our memories, in an overall sense all that happens is just as per the expected order of the universe.

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  • Js Black (5/21/2009 8:04:00 AM)

    Great emotion to your work...excellent job....Jeff

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  • Miriam Maia PaduaMiriam Maia Padua (5/18/2009 8:55:00 AM)

    such a elegant write...
    thoughts' provoking....
    really a well crafted piece...
    10+++

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  • Ken E Hall (5/18/2009 1:44:00 AM)

    Such a large meaningful story in so few words, word work chiseled with skill++++++10
    regards

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  • Afzal Hussain (5/17/2009 11:04:00 PM)

    Beautiful and so picturesque!

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  • Marieta MaglasMarieta Maglas (5/17/2009 3:57:00 PM)

    Apparently, nothing happened.The nature waits solemnly the train departure Time stops to start again with the departure of the train..Two persons have been separated. Two people are breaking in their love.Nature is personified: .''A sparrow was crying somewhere/Breezes were walking silently.'' Epithets of color appear, very suggestive, that emphasizes the painting of the nature: ''dusty yellow leafs''.We expect the tear, but, no, it looks like rain. A beautiful poem.(and my little 10 is there)

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  • rago rago (5/16/2009 10:08:00 AM)

    a beautiful write.........you have made where she was get into..........

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  • John Tiong ChunghooJohn Tiong Chunghoo (5/15/2009 12:46:00 PM)

    there is something very nice about this poem. i love the fresh approach in getting us to feel for the passage of time. keep this up ashra.

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  • Xxx-reno0osh-xxx {admire Me} (5/14/2009 2:17:00 PM)

    tht 1 ur writin bout is waaaay too luckyy....(:

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  • Saadat TahirSaadat Tahir (5/9/2009 2:00:00 PM)

    a lot of room for rambling ambling and maybe goin off the tangent altogether..

    evocative...deep and apperas focused and purposeful...yet ellusive...sometime this is a cherished poetic pinnacle
    solid write...cheers

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  • Ben Gieske (5/5/2009 3:37:00 PM)

    Your images truly evoke strong feelings and leave a lot of room for the imagination and interpretation. Well composed.

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