2013 A Flowing River Poem by * Sunprincess *

2013 A Flowing River



The year 2013 was a flowing river of time
it flowed swiftly
sometimes over beds of rocks
sometimes over pebbles
it caressed the embankment
and kept on flowing
occasionally
it was a smooth flowing river
and other times it was very tumultuous
still it kept on flowing and flowing
and flowing
then all of a sudden
it cascaded down
into a beautiful waterfall
to fill the natural pool below
and became the year 2014
enjoying this beautiful pool of time
enchanting unicorns run and play
with the fairies who come to dance
in the warm sunshine

Tuesday, December 31, 2013
Topic(s) of this poem: time
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Daniel Brick 01 April 2014

This poem makes a wonderful counterpart to COME ON A JOURNEY WITH ME. This one describes time as something we can see and follow, something which doesn't create mystery and confusion but rather moves straight to its destination - a New Year - which picks up and continues the forward movement. This is a celebration of VISIBLE TIME, because all of its actions are observable, all of its effects are known. How reassuring! But then turn to your other poem, and WOW! nothing can be seen clearly, everything is paradoxical. The one trait both poems share is your enthusiastic voice narrating two different journeys, making poetry out of the mysteries of nature.

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Yasmin Khan 02 January 2014

It's an interesting metaphorical poem. Time is like a flowing river and your poem describes it aptly.

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Valsa George 02 January 2014

Very imaginative, Rachel! Somehow you will find a space for fairies and unicorns! This poem flows smoothly with the flow of time! Greatly enjoyed! !

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Veeraiyah Subbulakshmi 02 January 2014

Good imagination..just nice to read..

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Kavya . 02 January 2014

excellent...the lines were dancing in front of my eyes and i was clearly visualizing the waterfall that you have described in a very smooth way......a good write

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Maxim Muyu 10 June 2014

I like the flow its so nice.

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Vivek Tiwari 26 May 2014

it reminds me of the similarities between time and tide they wait 4 none neither you can make them stop but if u try to run with time its enjoying nice loved reading

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Patti Masterman 19 May 2014

Time does flow just like water. A very apt metaphor. :)

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Daniel Brick 10 May 2014

I saw the dates of composition the second time I read this poem. It enhanced my enjoyment to realize it was written on New Year's Eve and posted on New Year's Day. What struck me by the time I reached the middle was the quietude of the poem - this is not a poem celebrating the end/the beginning with a wild party, or even a large group of people. It emphasizes the steady flow of time over a year when even obstacles and irregularities can be overcome by (yes) the quiet water. I liked the turning point of the waterfall marking the new year. The celebrants of 2014 - the unicorns and fairies - seem more like guardians - there will always be the need for guardians! The year is quietly unfolding.

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When an year is passing an age is going to be high in one's life period and such period dwindles from the total figure. The poet says that the year has gone just like a flowing of river and imagination is supported in beautiful poem and likes very much.

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