Aftab Alam

Gold Star - 39,838 Points (15 th April 1967 / RANCHI,)

A Dark Shadow - Poem by Aftab Alam

I am suffering with heavy rain
Always cloud burst within, with pain
Which cave hid you grief
Tell me cavern in brief
My tears! My thought rill
My hope and despair playing,
Where is the labyrinth hill?
That exists within me,
A dark shadow
Walks on bright sun
Is this a life or fun?
The cyclone of thought
Uprooted gigantic trees
Grasses enjoying,
The challenges,
O! Formidable calm breeze.
Ease and ease, don't freeze

Topic(s) of this poem: sorrow

Comments about A Dark Shadow by Aftab Alam

  • Don Blumenthal (10/20/2014 6:54:00 PM)

    A bit jumpy because, I think, English is not the poets' first language.
    I lime the contrasts and imagery throughout that melds the vision of a
    Dream with the deep emotions involved while in the labyrinth especially
    Like...My hope and despair playing,
    Where is the labyrinth hill? ....
    All in all very effective depiction of sorrow working its way throughout the labyrinthine
    Courses of the mind's eye when in deepest sorrow transforming from grief.
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  • Wahab Abdul (11/9/2013 10:08:00 PM)

    a dark shadow walks on bright sun...lovely it (Report) Reply

  • Tirupathi Chandrupatla (11/7/2013 8:51:00 AM)

    Suffering with heavy rain is beautifully explained. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Gajanan Mishra (11/7/2013 3:01:00 AM)

    your cyclone of thought, I like it. thanks. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, November 7, 2013

Poem Edited: Saturday, September 20, 2014

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