So charming, one found him amusing:
though, even right from the beginning
he didn't know how to love women
cared nothing for loving and giving
while worshiped through earning a living
had squandered such savings on sinning
at liberty quaffing and sipping
negligent, wounding, unthinking,
let loose the tongue's excessive prating
and blasphemed which sounded so frightening;
when dog like haphazardly mating
remorse and compassion were lacking
brutal, the grip held kept tightening
oblivious as the web woven
yet floundering, barely surviving;
treacherous, insecure, wavering
and night after eve slowly sinking
unyielding, that ole Demon's drinking!
June 2006
First hand experience of a drunkard.
Is this bottled up TENsion? ... Doth drink of spirits help he rescue one or more lonesome maidens? No courage of heart... Lips do sip to tendered start. How may she meet into his lips? .. Lackly spirited courage of faith. Bent to will's of her mistake... I give thy heart to her to take. Like a long longest rake left out of reach... To gather to thee her loving's unbreach. Your poem was great. Hadda givvit ta TEN. God bless all poets-MJG.
Impressive! A well crafted and poignant write that clearly shows your wisdom and depth in your creative mind! It is such a great pleasure to read such touching and thought provoking works from someone as talented as you! 10+++ Thank you for sharing and keep it up! God Bless You! Love and Peace for always! Romeo from New York City!
you make your poetry look so effortless.I'll be reading more in the future.Thank you
I like the way that your rhymes pound obsessively through this poem - this has great force and an emotional power that comes from the matching of the emotional content with the form.
Such a poem demands respect for its truth..we all in life have our own ways of dealing with the torture our souls have had to face...This write reflects this very thing..the struggle of giving all..mostly our trust to the wrong people. A wolf in Sheep's Clothing...I felt this well thought out write, this true emotional roller-coaster Stay strong Jon.
Some memories are best forgotten.....easier said, than done! Bless you my friend. Thanks for sharing.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
HATE TO SAY IT, GILLIAN, BUT THIS SOUNDS LIKE THE STORY OF POE...LOL....VERY FINE PENNING...SMOOTH FLUX, WELL CRAFTED IN STRUCTURE& RHYTHM...SOLID CHOICE OF DICTION TO PAINT YOUR IMAGERY AROUND...''''''''''''''''FRANK