A Watery Secret. Poem by Fay Slimm

A Watery Secret.

Rating: 5.0


Watery messenger of past love-hates,
Rivering, subtley, each potentised remnant
Of thousands before. Stored, they are waiting,
Unseen, for us to catch sound of laments.
Or of happiness states. Minutely floating.

Deep-level listeners hear musical notes
Of lives long gone, their chromosome cries,
Though shaken, pressed down, liquidised, need
To be heard. Passing birds tilt an eye
As though aware. Furry travellers speed,
But halt to hear silent melody. Stoat,
Vole and Otter detect symphony. Why
Then can't we turn an ear, listen carefully
To rivers, streaming the smiles and past sighs
Of yester-year folk, - - and learn if we dare.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kris Smith 01 January 2009

Yes we should learn and this poem deserves mor than I can give it Fay 10++++++ Chris

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Fay Slimm 01 January 2009

Thank you Rachel - - - - glad it appealed to you and that the lines mentioned resounded........

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Naseer Ahmed Nasir 02 January 2009

The river of time is full of secret watery sounds, if we dare to listen.......10/10.

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Robert Howard 05 January 2009

This is a unique and fascinating perspective on love. If life is a flowing stream then we, with all our loving, swim together in that stream and join our singing with every other living creature. Beautifully written and very well titled.

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Frank Cannon 06 January 2009

Wondrous streams of thought flowing from your pen Fay.

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Fiona Davidson 15 January 2009

Lovely message in this very strong write...enjoyed the read....thank you...Fi

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Mark Nwagwu 15 January 2009

I love the pace, the rhythm goes to my head and I tilt my ear to listen to the symphony that Stoat, Vole and Otter detect that I may bathe in that river streaming the smiles and sighs of years long since gone. I've got the time. Thank you, Fay, thank you for giving us a write truly worthy of our time. Mark 10+

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James Timothy Jarrett 13 January 2009

Great write Fay! your handling of syntax and rythym in this piece is awesome. A deep and lovely poem

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Herbert Nehrlich1 11 January 2009

I too, am a passing bird tilting an eye at what you write. This is, of course, an easy 19, and I like watery secrets of all kinds. Hxx

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Scott Austin 08 January 2009

The reader can image this scene wonderfully, peaceful feelings can be felt in these words you have expressed…thank you. Scott

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