Why write many words
when a very few
can suffice
The sound the bird
did not make as it flew past
my window
shouted to me
let go, be free.
And the gentle air
as it held the
falling leaf said to me
I need not fear.
The wind carried away
all thoughts
leaving a space
full of You.
it is interesting how you package your words. it is magical. i say package because yo have the gift of being concise. i also at times am able to do this, as some of my poems listed here show, but I'm not sure I have the same ability that you display. I really love what you've written so far that I've read. I have pourposefully picked the ones marked as new. if you have any suggestions for poems you think I should or want me to read please tell me.
This is a most special write David....'the wind carried away all, leaving just thoughts of You.' Sounds to me like a tribute to love and is so evident that yes, one can feel it in the air.~ ~ ~mm..xo~ ~ ~
I like this David, it's speaks in hushed tones but nevertheless the message is delivered. Lovely. HG: -) xx
Perfect in its succinctness indeed. Atmospheric and flowing. An unusual approach and it works. t x
This is really beautiful and enlightening! Brillant! Theo
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I really liked your poem. Actually, I really like: 'Why write many words when a very few can suffice' all by itself.