Jazlle D. H.

Rookie - 0 Points (22nd January / Valenzuela)

Alone - Poem by Jazlle D. H.

Are you lonely every night
it's what I've tried to fight?
Do you really think about me
with the sweet memories we shared?
Are you really missing me
like the way I feel inside?
Do you regret we parted ways
to let us see the reality?
Are you dreaming of the days
when were happy and gay?
Does your memory wander
to a flowery garden
when I kiss you, my dear?
Is the space in your place
painted blue and bare?
Do you stare at your doorway
and imagine I'm standing there?
Are you wishing to offer a warm hug
when you see me crying?
Does my voice echo in your room
and do you hear my laughter?
Are you envisioning the songs
that for you I love to sing?
Does your heart weep and bleed
like mine pierced in grief?
Please tell me darling...
Shall I come back again
to fill the longing of our broken hearts?
Shall I see you once more?
I beg you babe...
Will you wait for me tonight?

(10th June 2008)


Comments about Alone by Jazlle D. H.

  • Mehta Hasmukh AmathalalMehta Hasmukh Amathalal (6/30/2009 5:58:00 AM)

    Are you lonely every night
    it's what I've tried to fight?
    Do you really think about me
    with the sweet memories we shared? ....lovely and intense feeling beautifully expressed.. i love it and appriciate too...


    read mine you go alone, miss I miss you, mary to marrytragic end, o mother.. comment too
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  • Ency BearisEncy Bearis (6/21/2009 2:10:00 AM)

    nice song...err write..ala Lonesome Tonight by Elvis Presley...good passionate verses and lovely to read...10 (Report)Reply

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  • Saadat TahirSaadat Tahir (4/11/2009 2:11:00 PM)

    you are a prolific writer

    nice poem...easy and melancholy..so very near the truth

    sat
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  • Chris Vanbrusselen (8/31/2008 6:06:00 PM)

    I should have given you ten points but altough your poem is wonderful to me, something I cannot explain stands in the way; , ! chris.STILL A KISS. (Report)Reply

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  • Adeiza A. (8/26/2008 3:42:00 AM)

    Hi joan...you've got good expression of feelings here in this piece of poetry
    and you did express a lot there. Your interaction with nature in these lines are also reflective. Good piece of work here Joan. I like this poetry
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  • Stephen West (7/19/2008 2:49:00 PM)

    Are you lonesome tonight
    Do you miss me tonight
    Are you sorry we drifted apart
    Does your memory stray
    To a brighter summer day
    When I kissed you
    And called you sweetheart
    Do the chairs in your parlour seem empty and bare
    Do you gaze at your doorstep and picture me there
    Is your heart filled with pain
    Shall I come back again
    Tell me dear are
    You lonesome tomight

    Al Jolson 1930
    Elvis Presley 1960
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  • Dr. Kolitha Lelwala (7/18/2008 7:16:00 AM)

    Dear Joan
    This is a wonderful poem. Touches anybody who has had the feeling of loneliness.

    Loneliness comes in waves..
    aching the ventricles...
    making dysrhythmia...
    there you hear my heart mourns.
    trekking over Himalayas...
    kissing wild flowers...
    dipping in freezing streams...
    I miss you so much...
    Yet the heart aches in pain.

    Loneliness....
    The enemy of concentration
    Hurdles for happy thoughts
    Hope my dreams'll heal my heart
    in this Autumn
    before chilling winter comes
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  • Nora Eason (7/10/2008 3:16:00 PM)

    OMG! That was Beautiful, Joan you are very talented, keep up the great work.
    This was Awesome! ! ! ! I hope you will read my poems also.
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  • Fred Babbin (7/9/2008 3:05:00 PM)

    Since you asked for my evaluation, I will give it to you. And since I am older than you - I'm 82, I can say what I dam please. I am very tired of Luv Pomes, especially on poetry web sites. Everyone who writes them is between 10 and 30 and either in or out of ''love''. You can pay more attention to your meter, and some of it is almost good enough for greeting cards. (Report)Reply

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  • Ivor Hogg (7/7/2008 7:55:00 AM)

    enforced loneliness is pure hell.You get your message across clearly one nit Were you lonely last night would have been the correct tense (Report)Reply

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  • Rajaram RamachandranRajaram Ramachandran (7/7/2008 6:27:00 AM)

    Lonliness sometime kindles such unwanted thoughts in one's mind. (Report)Reply

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  • Mr Nobody (7/7/2008 4:58:00 AM)

    I like this, the premise is interesting. (Report)Reply

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  • Michael ShafferMichael Shaffer (7/6/2008 9:41:00 PM)

    It grabs you and holds you. I like it very much. (Report)Reply

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  • Vijaiya Ramkissoon (7/6/2008 5:52:00 AM)

    filled with depth and meaning, i gave u a 10 for this (Report)Reply

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  • Dr.subhendu KarDr.subhendu Kar (7/5/2008 3:17:00 PM)

    heart when lies in askance
    the blue may satiate the thirst of night
    love still croons in the room of desire
    as lone silence was the guest
    of last night........................yet love provoking, and luscious green, wellpennede, thanks for sharing
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  • Meer Mushfique MahmoodMeer Mushfique Mahmood (6/30/2008 7:13:00 AM)

    Sweet utterances from a tender heart. I will always hunt for your this type poem. (Report)Reply

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  • Tia Maria (6/29/2008 1:54:00 PM)

    awwww... I can relate - you are not alone my angel X (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, June 18, 2008

Poem Edited: Friday, July 11, 2008


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