poet C. P. Sharma

C. P. Sharma

Amazement!

(I met Kabir)
This morning when in trance,
At my body I had a glance,
Me, its composition amazed,
How deftly are the elements caged! ! !

I met a potter, the Earth,
At the wheel she had berth;
Carving the pots so fine,
No artist can ever design.

Its every piece was unique,
Built with a perfect technique.
She had designed a cage,
Nine exits she did stage.

The Fire provided it the fuel,
The Water did keep it cool,
The Sky did its limit provide,
The Air bird was there inside.

The Air fanned them all,
Them in their places install.
The world suddenly became alive,
It was at the Marine Drive.

The bird inside cluttered and danced,
Its all activities I glanced.
Finally, Life bird flew out,
From my trance I came out.

Poem Submitted: Thursday, May 1, 2008
Poem Edited: Sunday, March 8, 2009

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  • Gul naz (12/29/2009 6:35:00 AM)

    great to read.........esp i liked the symbolism in ur poem

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  • Rani Turton (11/30/2009 11:51:00 AM)

    'The world suddenly became alive, /It was at the Marine Drive.' I liked this poem and enjoyed the insertion of this line.

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  • Rachel Butler (9/20/2009 8:13:00 AM)

    The bird inside cluttered and danced,
    Its all activities I glanced.


    Rachel Ann Butler

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  • Lady Grace (6/1/2009 12:59:00 AM)

    very good to read.it is well penned..grace

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  • Lynda Robson (5/19/2009 1:52:00 AM)

    A very enjoyable read CP, great imagery in this amazing piece,
    10
    Lynda xx

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  • Miriam Maia PaduaMiriam Maia Padua (5/18/2009 7:19:00 AM)

    very wholesome...
    lover of nature...of nature's gift...
    the gift of life...
    a very lovely poem displayed here...
    elements are wonderfully pictured out
    ...interesting write....thoughts are superbly described(as usual)
    10+++

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  • Jacob Courtney (5/14/2009 8:44:00 PM)

    very beautiful words. i could imagine this before my very eyes.

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  • Bonnie Collins (5/14/2009 5:30:00 PM)

    This is written very good, and enjoyed the way you exucuted this.... Very nice feel.

    Bonnie

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  • Sandra Fowler (5/14/2009 2:56:00 PM)

    A skillful use of rhyme and metaphor combine to
    produce a very fascinating piece.10, for
    your vivid experience.

    Warm regards,

    Sandra

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  • rago rago (5/14/2009 9:42:00 AM)

    amazing is your writing........pancha boothangal and its value depicted in a beautiful way........kindly see my 10++

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  • Subroto Chatterjee (5/14/2009 8:25:00 AM)

    Amazing...! !
    Was it at Haji Ali on Marine Drive? ? Good metaphors & personification.
    IMAGINE...
    Cheers.
    Subroto

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  • Bob Blackwell (5/14/2009 5:23:00 AM)

    Wonderful description of how all life is born. 10++

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  • Mamta Agarwal (5/14/2009 4:39:00 AM)

    An intense moment of realization of perfection of human body, elements that bring it alive and a soul that gives nourishment. in amazement you looked. great write, inspired by Sufi poet Kabir. it has the same depth as his couplets.10++

    THanks
    Regards
    Mamta

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  • Lalitha iyer (5/14/2009 4:04:00 AM)

    Very nice introspection. Beautiful reflection.

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  • Paul Hansford (5/14/2009 2:59:00 AM)

    It is always difficult, in writing a poem as strictly rhymed as this, to make the rhymes natural. There are also a couple of rather awkward inversions - 'Me, its composition amazed' is not what we would normally say. But, having said that, this is an interesting and thoughtful poem, and keeps up its image all through.

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  • Andrew BlakemoreAndrew Blakemore (5/14/2009 2:54:00 AM)

    And so the life bird was free to fly- great imagery. Best wishes, Andrew

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  • Ramesh T ARamesh T A (5/14/2009 2:42:00 AM)

    Truth revealing imagery in the poem makes it amazing! Soul is indeed a fluttering bird in the cage for all! Indeed a wonderful composition, friend!

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  • Naidz Ladia (5/14/2009 2:31:00 AM)

    if this is a food, this is a very nice delicacy...but since this is poetry, my gosh, , , this is excellent...naizz

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  • Vidyadhar DurgekarVidyadhar Durgekar (5/13/2009 9:33:00 AM)

    Amazing composition....................10

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  • Florence P. Wordsmith (2/9/2009 11:57:00 AM)

    It warms my heart to know that others think about these things too!

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