Lauren Michaels

An Attempt At Haiku - Poem by Lauren Michaels

A dichotomy
My skin, pale like my mother
Flushed like My father.

Comments about An Attempt At Haiku by Lauren Michaels

  • Marc Mannheimer (10/25/2007 12:16:00 PM)

    That rocked! (Oy vey, they want 20 or more characters for my comment, how can you be sincere and terse when you're given a quota?) (Report)Reply

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  • Donall DempseyDonall Dempsey (5/19/2007 5:50:00 PM)

    Not an attempt.. it is! Rename it Haiku.. You've done what you set out to and done it very well...precise...concise...and turning on a sixpence. Says all it has to say in the best possible way. Very well observed and very well executed. Lovel the use of the word dichotomy to cover the first five syllables...never thought I would see it used so well and so cleverly. More? Please!

    love Donall

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  • Ernest Mayer (6/27/2006 9:45:00 PM)

    gotta agree with goldy. (Report)Reply

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  • Goldy Locks (5/14/2006 5:22:00 PM)

    well done, Lauren. an attempt? i say a nail. so much said here in 17 syllables. (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, May 14, 2006

Poem Edited: Saturday, July 24, 2010

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