Everyone is born so innocent
As your body ages your darkness raises
Your good is gone and you begin to try to repent
Repent for all your past sins
You learn there is no god to forgive you
You try to escape your darkness
But it hits you like a thousand sharp pins
Darkness surrounds your heart
Turns your mind and soul black
You remember the saying within every bit of darkness there is a light
All I see is eternal night
This is a curse that you can never fight
You can't go back
Your light is gone forever
Like myself you will begin to enjoy this
As darkness consumes you
Sad lines. Hope that you will distinguish soon that the Light is still there. Look closer and you will see it in the innocent laughter of the children, in the morning dew resting peacefully on the rose petals... Light never fails to disappoint, never goes away. Light is life! ! Think positive my fellow poet! Regards, ~Besa
Those who walked in darkness have seen the brightest light if they wanted to see it. Anyway, you have shaped your poem very originally and only 10 for your work :) Best wishes. A.
beautiful piece and powerful All I see is eternal night This is a curse that you can never fight You can't go back Your light is gone forever
Life can really tarnish a person's self-perception and world view..it is so difficult to remain pure in heart and spirit..very profound and insightful poem that is nicely written..congratulations on being Member of The Day..a ten..
How depressing and wonderfully horrific. Good name that will draw the readers in. I wish it described more of what happenned to you after the darkness consumed you. Like the idea that the author enjoys the process of the consuming darkness. We must see to understand darkness. Understanding the darkness will allow us to choose if we want it...because if you want light, you have the power to choose light. Thought inspiring idea but the poem needs a bit of works.
Darkness can consume us at any age. It is sad when it affects youth. This is the age to learn to fight darkness and not to loose hope. Learn to fight and you will not be consumed by it even when you age.
Precocious and engaging at first but it soon sounds like something a young person would write with no experience in growing old but trying so hard to imagine being old & miserable...
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I hope some where in your eternal night you will see a beautiful star directing you to life. Do hang on for your powerful words will heal so many