o, lord
let thy trundling wheels
crush this ego ridden
chariot of empty bones
of shallow dreams
of lecherous lust
***
o, jagannadh
this bag of flesh
sags under the weight
of uncommon greed
***
squash this clay mould
of imperfection
you moulded more out of habit
in a fleeting
wink of disinterestedness
***
this mould created
to amuse yourself
is entrapped
in the snarl of desire
this vacant structure
is forever fixed in
the net of illusions
this shallow chariot
time and again deviates
from its course…
***
o, lord
pound this particle
under your divine wheels
as your mighty chariot
rolls along the sandy bay
***
redeem it from
all these and more…
25jun2009
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wonderful.... 'this shallow chariot time and again deviates from its course…' very true. spectacular piece... a li'l bit inconsistent i tht, but effective nevertheless. in all, awesome. thank you.
thnq sarvesh for pointing out the inconsistency in the poem. actually each stanza is one short prayer with different conceptions of this body. i should have seperated each. i did it now after reading your close comments. thnq, once again, young man!
read it again...and the third prayer is awesome.... a-huh...got no words. thank you.
This is beautiful Indira. It reads like a latter day Upanishad. I loved it. 10+++
dear indira....i have no words to say! the poem is beautiful in meaning and also feelings.i have been to puri to see rathyatra many times.....your poem describes the moment, when you see the lord of the world on the chariot.the feeling of fear, excitement, awe and finally bliss.you write beautifully indira! .....ritty
squash this clay mould of imperfection you moulded more out of habit in a fleeting wink of disinterestedness great work... each word is soo genuine and pure... got a flow and cohesion even each stanza is one short prayer... Indira, you know the art and I would love to learn from you... Regards, Kamran
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
'o, lord crush this sand-particle under your divine wheels as your mighty chariot rolls along the sandy bay' Stunning composition.