Suzanne Hayasaki

Menomonee Falls, WI, USA
Suzanne Hayasaki
Menomonee Falls, WI, USA
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As Timeless As Stalactites

Rating: 5.0
Time drips like lime down the sides of my soul.
Layering my lifetimes with a mineral film
Clouding my awareness of the vastness
Of the cave of my own evolution.

I descend in darkness.
I hear water trickle below me.
Swirling and gurgling through cracks
Rounding them into the veins of this cave's heart.
If I am still, I feel the pumping,
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Thursday, November 23, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: meditation,reality
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COMMENTS
Chinedu Dike 17 January 2020
A witty and compelling composition nicely put together. A work of an intricate mind. Thanks for sharing and do remain enriched.
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Glen Kappy 08 March 2018
Suzanne, this is interesting to read with its cave descriptions in your extended metaphor. I’ve never felt this, never thought of this parallel, so it strikes me as stand-apart original. Speaking of literal stalactites, I think of Plitvica in Croatia and Carlsbad Caverns south of me which could be a (long) day’s excursion, both places amazing in their own ways. -Glen
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Rebecca Navarre 27 November 2017
Wow! ! ! ! ! This Has Such A Powerful Beauty! ! ! ! ! Ever So Heart Touching! ! ! ! ! Thank You Ever S0 Much For Sharing This! ! ! ! ! ! Endless 10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! +++++.....
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Suzanne Hayasaki 03 December 2017
Thanks Rebecca! I look forward to your supportive comments!
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Bill Cantrell 23 November 2017
Wow! This is the type of poetry that makes this site worthwhile, once in a thousand poems a great one comes along like this! your first four lines captivated me with its uniqueness, and every line after brilliantly evolved to a masterpiece of a poem, your ending is absolute perfection! ! I can see this soon as poem of the day! ! ! Great job! ! !
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Suzanne Hayasaki 23 November 2017
Thank you Bill! Your comments are very kind and very appreciated!
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Dr Antony Theodore 23 November 2017
Like a womb. Like a hermitage. Like an ancient sacred space. I feel safe.. great poetic expressions self revealing....... thank you dear poetess.. tony
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