Renu Rakheja a.k.a Tranquil Ocean


(b) 26 (Pain/Longing) Forever? - Poem by Renu Rakheja a.k.a Tranquil Ocean

Were you a cloud hovering over me
giving solace to my heart for a few days
continuing in your journey
forever?

Were you the sun that warmed,
lighting up my life for a few days
now obscured by clouds that swarmed
forever?

Were you a ship passing by
that anchored in my life for a few days
moving on to another shore in your quest
forever?

Were you a shooting star
blazing through my life for a few days
All I'm left with is a bunch of your thoughts
forever?

We will continue our ways
but you have touched my heart
with your purity and tenderness that will stay
forever


Comments about (b) 26 (Pain/Longing) Forever? by Renu Rakheja a.k.a Tranquil Ocean

  • (3/2/2007 8:01:00 AM)

    I love the idea of someone touching you so much their presence never leaves you. Beautiful. Well done with you imagery, this poem is alive. ~Linley~ (Report)Reply

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  • (10/16/2006 7:51:00 PM)

    Yearing questions left by a moments touch, placed in the finest of poems....... (Report)Reply

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  • Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr (10/16/2006 12:34:00 PM)

    Love lost, but was it ever truly found, other than but for a segment of glinted passion? Great storyline here, & i agree with me lassir, tara'bout the profoundity of th' repetitious, subliminal seed-planting of the past tense...GONE.... & that looming, thwarting, question maark......To be continued, perhaps, T.O.? '''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''fjr (Report)Reply

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  • (10/16/2006 11:32:00 AM)

    In the context, and finely-penned it is, the past tense burns on the mind of the reader. And begs the question. A well-written, give-us-more piece. Aptly so. t x (Report)Reply

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  • (10/16/2006 11:16:00 AM)

    beautiful images here..

    i can sense a very strong yearning in these lines...

    Asma...
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  • (10/16/2006 10:07:00 AM)

    It's like the hearts agree but the minds do not want to admit it. Liked it :)

    Preets
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Poem Submitted: Monday, October 16, 2006

Poem Edited: Tuesday, October 19, 2010


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