sarwar chowdhury

Rookie - 14 Points (Origin- Bangladesh, Living abroad.)

*because Of Love Do Not Entrap - Poem by sarwar chowdhury

Perhaps ten years old
The little boy.
So impish
All the time in hullaballo
But so bright effervescent jovial.

Afternoon were smiling
The boy gladdened-
An unforeseen beautiful litttle bird singing,
Sitting on a mango bough.
Tremendous tune her!
Yellow neck, reddish small beak,
Adoring eyes,
Beside nose a black glow,
As painter's quirky bravura touch.
Wing feathers are black and white.
Cheering, roly-poly, ecstatic!

'Woooo! What a beautiful bird! '
The jovial charmed.
With a steadfast look asked-
'What's thou name hi?
Tell me true don’t shy! ’

'Call call as thou wish a name.
I know all the day thy in game.
The bird answered.

Rising his hand the boy offered-
'Beauty,
come near,
Thy dear
Sit on my hand
Want to love thee until end.’

It seems she-bird smile.
Things on the way not infantile.
Said-
‘Salute to concord
Thy so quick, thou elan love,
May come near on proviso-
Do not try to entrap me,
So that I can love thee until death! '

The little boy reckoned for a while then surmised-
'Ok beauty, okay dear come on
As thou choice I would act upon.'

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Liberty of beauty and LOVE

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Comments about *because Of Love Do Not Entrap by sarwar chowdhury

  • Kafil Uddin Raihan (7/22/2009 4:53:00 AM)

    Rising his hand the boy offered-
    'Beauty,
    come near,
    Thy dear
    Sit on my hand
    Want to love thee until end.’
    Well penned the interaction between a boy and a bird.Really excellent sir.....
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  • S... Che (12/17/2008 4:15:00 AM)

    wow beautiful poem vote 10 (Report)Reply

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  • Kaye Cee (10/19/2008 9:54:00 PM)

    Sarwar, I have read your poem [.......... Entrap]. Remove the word 'were, ' as you don't need it. And 'her, ' as we already know the bird's a she. Instead of 'reddish small' it sounds better to say 'small reddish, ' as small is the stronger adjective. And would this line fit: 'Besides a black glowing nose'? It's a weird depiction I get.

    When you get to the part where you're talking to the bird in biblical or Shakespearean or old-time poets' language, you threw me off a bit. Why is the conversation so old-fashioned? 'Thou'? Is that how a bird talks or someone talks to the bird? Does the bird read Shakespeare?

    But besides that, wonderful description. I liked it very much.

    Kaye Cee
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  • Dr Kamran Haider (10/19/2008 12:13:00 PM)

    Beauty and love can never be entrapped, if untainted and pure. You definitely have discovered and shared such serenity, freedom and joy in life that I must say can only be reincarnated after a great struggle and exploration of our inner self. Great piece of poetry, comparable to great romantics…

    Regards, Kamran
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  • Rinzu Susan Rajan (10/17/2008 7:38:00 AM)

    written with beauty of words... (Report)Reply

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  • Asef Fakih (10/16/2008 8:06:00 AM)

    poetry of the highest quality 10+ (Report)Reply

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  • Sadiqullah KhanSadiqullah Khan (10/16/2008 4:20:00 AM)

    A poem story with great meaning, , , , , , , , , , , well written (Report)Reply

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  • Kaci Souisa (10/15/2008 4:28:00 PM)

    wow, the fluid use of language is absolutly marvelous! I love the way how the deeper meaning is hidden in such a seemingly bright poem. (Report)Reply

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  • Dr.Wardha Jawdat (10/15/2008 9:56:00 AM)

    'if you love someone let them go'....youve captured and tamed a lovely thought through this piece...well done..! thanks for sharing! (Report)Reply

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  • S... Che (10/15/2008 4:59:00 AM)

    Thy so quick, thou elan love,
    May come near on proviso-
    Do not try to entrap me,
    So that I can love thee until death

    Love it! love it! love it! ! ! ! rate 10
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  • Li Away (10/14/2008 3:23:00 PM)

    love and not owning, somewhat unconciously we do and need entrap ourselves

    we find liberty in that

    love don't entrap

    beautifully written
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  • Seema Aarella (10/14/2008 2:58:00 AM)

    a concept trite...but u have chisled it so magnificiently...an epitome of child's innocence and love's vast and selflessness...the vital freedom, nourisher of love!
    all expressed in a brilliant flow...!
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  • Tissa Calvert (10/13/2008 3:05:00 PM)

    really sweet and down to a certain point. (Report)Reply

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  • Stephanie Saba (10/13/2008 6:25:00 AM)

    finely detailed! ! a true work of art! (Report)Reply

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  • Bob Gibson (10/12/2008 3:36:00 PM)

    well posed, well written, finley executed (Report)Reply

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  • Miriam Maia PaduaMiriam Maia Padua (10/12/2008 9:09:00 AM)

    Great poem and a beautiful story merge into one..It brings smile to my lips while reading your piece..a lift on my heart..Love finely written and describe.....I'm giving this a 10...God bless (Report)Reply

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  • Issam Hal (10/12/2008 8:06:00 AM)

    endless clap from me man really it's so wonderful poem.
    tnx for the lines
    tnx for the words
    tnx for the fantasy
    and tnx for the love
    and tnx for ur mind.
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  • Aiswarya. T.anishAiswarya. T.anish (10/12/2008 7:39:00 AM)

    This poem is very nice. The lines are beautiful (Report)Reply

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  • Chitra - (10/12/2008 1:07:00 AM)

    Let the wings of love unfold
    Liberty of beauty expressed in a way never told

    Another diamond culled out from the depths of your mind.
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  • Seema Chowdhury (10/12/2008 12:03:00 AM)

    very nice and lovely composition. (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, October 8, 2008

Poem Edited: Monday, July 27, 2009


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