Bitterness And Hate Poem by louis rams

Bitterness And Hate

Rating: 4.8


do not let bitterness and hate consume you.
no one knows what your going thru.
no one can see the pain you're in
and what you feel is a crying sin.

the same way that there is bitterness in your heart.
stop! and give love a start.
love can rule all that we go through
it's all up to the inner you.

so look around you at the people who are
consumed with this hate.
make a change before it's too late.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM

do not let bitterness and hate consume you. no one knows what your going thru. no one can see the pain you're in and what you feel is a crying sin.... no place in our life a hate n bitterness.. even if u have to hate.. hate self....10 read mine i am disgrace... never say die and good bye.. go to hell

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Linda Weischedel 31 May 2009

Outstanding poem Louis!

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Kiarra Smith 30 October 2008

I like the IDEA of this poem moreso than the poem itself. Maybe, it is because I am bothered by the lack of a specific syllabic scheme. Some of the lines are cliche-ish like 'no one knows what you're going though'. The rhyme scheme is off at the end, I guess because there are only three lines. I don't think the last stanza is needed. People don't really like being preached to through poetry. It is obvious about what will happen when you allow bitterness in your heart. I think the strongest line is 'stop! and give love a start' I consider myself a cruel critiquer, so take it as a compliment when I say that I consider this a lyrical poem, like an old country song from the 60's. I don't like many things, but I will give this poem that compliment.

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