Burden Of Adam's Son.......Intertwined Life & Fate Poem by saadat tahir

Burden Of Adam's Son.......Intertwined Life & Fate

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Flailing nailed to tree of woe
Heartiest deed canst answer lo
Thunder claps atop fated trees
Impending havoc doth not sees
Betwixt ye cut the lancet clean
From the morrow not ye glean
Seeks dismal destiny fairest lock
Rudes loathe that sages mock
Tender feet hath burnt to hock
Crimson beads on braid an frock
Cringe ye that, hell hath send
Shapes the fate an olden bend
Tryst with Eden eagerly fought
Kings which to end hath sought
Wretched fate danced an got
Banshee wails, demons fraught.
Lore stealeth Adam's son.
Simple joys thatch hath done
Truth perishes as ocean raps
Sand grains most doomed to laps
Endless medleys hardly match
Eager that fire an fury snatch
Hear ye Dogs that yell in hell
Twixt, feisty demons fair to dwell
Lap blood off chopping blocks
Claw to bits the ascension rocks
Frenzied death to wistful morns
Contrive flames to fashioned forms.
Consumed reduced in deity's fold.
Vile the smiles that devils behold.

(Islamabad)
(May 13,2009)

COMMENTS OF THE POEM

nice and balanced poem i appreciate that keep on inking mate...

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Shashendra Amalshan 27 May 2009

you v used the kind of language that can pierce and touch the core of reader's heart...i specialy liked the phrase 'Tryst with Eden eagerly fought Kings which to end hath sought Wretched fate danced an got Banshee wails, demons fraught. Lore stealeth Adam’s son.' well if kings go in search of power, they are definitely gona get banshee wails, great and splendid write thanks 10++

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Howard Kern 24 May 2009

'contrive flames to fashionen forms' To me this is the poet's formal education and kerner grunt-work, which allows the poet to grow in understanding and abilty to sway a body of thought nice work10+

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Fiona Davidson 24 May 2009

Wonderful writing Saadat...images are great in this excellent read...Fi 10+++

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Bright Rose 13 May 2009

Saadat, that was a very lovely well written piece, you've done a great job in it, I can see that very clearly, loved your well chosen words. keep writing

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