louis rams

Crowded Room

i thought i saw your face in a crowded room
i turned to look, but you disappeared too soon

the vision of you stayed in my mind

as i felt my heart start to sink
my mind began to race faster
as it tried to think.

i thought of all the things we
had done in the past
and wondered why it did not last.

was it something that i said or done?
was i the foolish one?
did i get you to turn your back on me
or was it that you wanted to be free?

so now i search each and every crowded room
in hopes that i'll find you soon.

just to let you know
that in my heart you'll always be
for you have become a part of me.

Poem Submitted: Friday, February 6, 2009
Poem Edited: Saturday, February 7, 2009

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  • Krista Churchill (2/12/2009 12:26:00 AM)

    Nice work.. In a crowded room I do believe we all see so much sometimes it can be overwhelming.. Crazy too.. Great poem

    Krista

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  • April Breeland (2/7/2009 10:08:00 PM)

    Very well done. Only the last two lines I think could be possibly somewhere else in the poem. The stanza above it seemed to me it finished the poem. But hey your poems are all wonderfully made! ! !

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  • Sandra Fowler (2/7/2009 4:36:00 PM)

    Very wistful and poignant. I hope that you find your friend again
    one day.

    Kind regards,

    Sandra

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  • Leslie Alexis (heaven Is My Home) (2/7/2009 1:47:00 PM)

    brother, this piece brought tears to my eyes. it is as if you wrote it for me. ther eis this one young lady that had blessed my life briefly. we had become good friends, then she just disappeared. she goes to my school and i too search every room to see if her i can find.
    thank you.

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  • Linda WinchellLinda Winchell (2/7/2009 12:10:00 PM)

    Lovely way of saying things. God Bless, gave it a TEN! Cause your old and I like you! LOL
    Linda

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