Sunday, August 30, 2009

************ Free Spirit**********1979

Rating: 2.8
i was laying beneath a big pine tree
the birds were whistling cheerfully.
the cool gentle breeze blowing thru my hair
and i knew right there, i had not one care.

i saw a squirrel stop and look
it did'nt look like any you'd see in a book.
he was completly black and his eyes were red
that's when i realized that i was dead.
i had no form, no shape, no sound
i was above myself looking down.
louis rams
Lee Boueri 12 November 2019
The imagery is wonderful and the flow and rhythm just flows. Loved it
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A B Faniki 31 August 2019
A beaitiful images. Thanks for sharing such a simple and vivde piece of poem
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Melvina Germain 07 August 2015
This poem took me by surprise, I wasn't expecting that but it showed the astral travel, outside of the body and moving on and I find that quite delightful Louis.....
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Louis Rams 09 August 2015
your thoughts and words are beautiful - thank you
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Patricia Grantham 08 November 2014
A very deep and moving write. Made me sit up and pay attention. A black squirrel with red eyes. Spiritually enlightening.
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Earl Clark 09 September 2010
I liked the part about the strange squirrel and seeing your body on the ground. Nature distorted and out of body experience, transcending.
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Loved your poem. Caught my attention.
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Rachel Butler 04 November 2009
'I had no form, no shape, no sound' Rachel Ann Butler
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Scott Daniels 28 September 2009
I wasn't expecting the near death experience at the end... Wonderful poem. You actually gave me a start.
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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 08 September 2009
that's when i realized that i was dead. i had no form, no shape, no sound i was above myself looking down..oh dreadful experience and one can only have after death.... beautful words and fine expression abd being dead.. i loved it....10 read mine samsher(sword) ... no advice in troubled water...nothing before time
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Surya . 07 September 2009
bneautiful.beautiful in death.very interesting poem. voted10 surya
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