Jabulani Mzinyathi

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Discordant Voice - Poem by Jabulani Mzinyathi

when you sing the sweet melodies
mine will be the discordant voice
hold you by the scruff of the neck
repeatedly shaking the conscience
the conscience you now trample
under the jackboot of your gullibility
drenched by the water cannons of fear

see the rising storms of poverty
desperation walking along the streets
hunger thunder rumbling in the bellies
the mountains of hopelessness rising
lives decimated by scythes of diseases
hoping that the sun will shine once more
that there will be reverberations of laughter

Topic(s) of this poem: love and life


Poet's Notes about The Poem

now surrounded by waves of despair, hope refuses to die. that is the drug we need as we go through tough times. out of great heat and pressure we get diamonds. as peter tosh says ' i am a firm ripe diamond you cannot move i at all...' igziabeher yimasagan

Comments about Discordant Voice by Jabulani Mzinyathi

  • (7/28/2018 3:07:00 AM)

    Reminds me of Dambudzo. Good Rich stuff (Report)Reply

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  • Jabulani Mzinyathi (6/3/2017 6:11:00 AM)

    any poet needs the critics. am no exception (Report)Reply

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  • Anil Kumar Panda (6/1/2017 8:44:00 PM)

    Though its a sad poem about poverty and despair it ends with a positive note. That is what makes the poem interesting in the end. Very nice and Congrats. (Report)Reply

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  • Edward Kofi Louis (6/1/2017 2:24:00 PM)

    Poverty! ! With the muse of life. Thanks for sharing this poem with us. (Report)Reply

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  • Gajanan Mishra (6/1/2017 9:10:00 AM)

    the sun is there to shine only (Report)Reply

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  • Pranab K Chakraborty (6/1/2017 3:58:00 AM)

    ...........................................hoping that the sun will shine once more
    that there will be reverberations of laughter....................................... Yes, we hope it all throughout the third world of suffering and distress. Thanks for sending.
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  • Lantz Pierre (6/1/2017 3:53:00 AM)

    Great choice of title. I think I see this as a modern, un-rhymned sonnet. And I love the flow of it's construction. Even as it's divided into two equal stanzas of 7 lines each, the logic of the argument, the logic of the lyric is set up with an opening couplet and at the end a closing couplet. Two line of introduction, two lines of summation. Sandwiched between in the first stanza is the accusation, the wake-up call, the plea to snap out of it and pay attention. Switching over to the second stanza the train leaves the station on a tour of the indignities and inhumanities taking place all around. And this is where the poem absolutely sings. I mean literally. The music of this lines is sublime. The mellifluous of the consonance and assonance of these lines forces the pace along with a beauty of sound that belies the ugliness of what's being said. It's a masterstroke. And curls back on the opening couplet with a superb sense of irony. These lines particularly are such a sweet melody and yet are full of the discord the narrator promises to deliver. I think this is really a poem of startling depth and beauty. (Report)Reply

    Jabulani Mzinyathi(9/7/2017 8:24:00 PM)

    ummmmmmm am really flattered. thanks for the compliments

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  • Bernard F. Asuncion (6/1/2017 3:46:00 AM)

    The sun will shine once more..... congrats on being chosen.. a big 10+++++++ (Report)Reply

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  • Rajnish Manga (6/1/2017 3:40:00 AM)

    desperation walking along the streets
    hunger thunder rumbling in the bellies
    the mountains of hopelessness rising.... // These are the expressions of distress felt by a sensitive soul who has seen destitute people and poverty all around. Thanks for sharing this observation.
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  • (6/1/2017 2:40:00 AM)

    a poem with a strong message of hope for a better more sharing world in which to live? .............superbly written. (Report)Reply

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  • B.m. Biswas (6/1/2017 2:12:00 AM)

    Congratulations... Love it and enjoy it... Very optimistic poem. (Report)Reply

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  • Siddartha Montik (6/1/2017 12:59:00 AM)

    Liked the Verses..see the rising storms of poverty
    desperation walking along the streets
    hunger thunder rumbling in the bellies
    the mountains of hopelessness rising
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  • Siddartha Montik (6/1/2017 12:59:00 AM)

    Very Beautifully Expressed.. Strong words and vivid Write! ! Thank you for sharing Poet 10++++! (Report)Reply

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  • Tribhawan Kaul (6/1/2017 12:43:00 AM)

    Beautiful poem creating awareness towards the miseries shaking the conscienouness of the unawared ending with a hope, which always sustain lives. (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, May 21, 2017

Poem Edited: Sunday, May 21, 2017


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