Heart of Ice Die Die Die

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Drowning - Poem by Heart of Ice Die Die Die

I can't keep doing this to myself,
the stress will kill me.
I have to stop
my knife.
I can't keep doing this.
It's become out of control.
Too hard to control.
I'll kill myself,
possibly on accident,
but maybe not.
I've already tried,
too close a call.
Words carved into my skin.
ALONE
is the brand I bear.
I can't be trusted ALONE anymore.
But I'm drowning,
I can't see the surface anymore.
I call for help,
no I SCREAM
for it.
But no one answers.
They've all but forgotten
the girl they used to love,
or at least were friends with.
But she still won't blame
another for her pain,
only herself.
Bubbles slipping from her lips
she sinks down
into her sea of depression.
Frozen and on the brink of death
she opens her blue eyes one more time.
Her hair everywhere
around her in a sea of the bluest blue
and moves her now frozen lips
for what may be the last time.
With my dying breath I ask you,
will you save my heart
even if it's not worth saving?
She closes her eyes
and drifts downward.
Help came to late.

Dec.-10-09

Don't let this happen to you or a person you care about. Ever. Help doesn't always need to come to late. But if you don't help, who will? Be the one who stands up and saves a life. Be the one who stands up and is a Hero. Sometimes, a smile is all it takes. Sometimes, it's more. But isn't it worth it?
Check out the song Hero by Superchick.


Comments about Drowning by Heart of Ice Die Die Die

  • (7/29/2010 12:52:00 PM)


    amazing, u were right, one of ur best. deep and powerful, im sorry (Report) Reply

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  • (3/7/2010 7:45:00 AM)


    I LOVE this poem and I LOVE the song Hero by Superchick. Amazing poem. Amazing song. Amazing job =) (Report) Reply

  • (12/30/2009 10:21:00 PM)


    Chills. Best poem I've read on this site.10/10. And I don't give those. (Report) Reply

  • (12/20/2009 5:20:00 PM)


    In case you dont know...the demons of hell
    play tunes to render souls weak..
    Hey you got talent, please dont kill your self
    We will miss you and your well express poems...
    You got lots to live for.....
    Dont make hell's demon pull you in!
    (Report) Reply

  • (12/14/2009 5:29:00 PM)


    that one was good too.i'm no poem expert or anything (haha read my poem it royally sucks) but it seemed like it changed i liked the last half best.it got deep i think a sad story expexcially since i used to know a girl that cut. (Report) Reply

  • (12/13/2009 4:49:00 PM)


    I liked tis one but I too thought the poem somhow changed in essence and got better when you moved from the first person to the third person maybe you could experiment more with that. (Report) Reply

  • Shekhar Joshi (12/13/2009 12:51:00 PM)


    Ah such a sad story....nicely written....the opening is not as strong as i might have like liked and compared to the latter part....but i like ur poem....
    Not ur best tho....
    Good one....liked it....\m/
    (Report) Reply

  • Shekhar Joshi (12/13/2009 12:51:00 PM)


    Ah such a sad story....nicely written....the opening is not as strong as i might have like liked and compared to the latter part....but i like ur poem....
    Not ur best tho....
    Good one....liked it....\m/
    (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, December 10, 2009

Poem Edited: Tuesday, May 25, 2010


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