Wounds Poems: 93 / 500

Echo Of Silence

Rating: 5.0

This tortuous canyon coiling its jagged edges
razors through the sinewed sediments,
deluvinations of painful fomentations
plowing through acres of rock and soil
and the sinking ache of a heart stranded,
a single boulder brooding over the center
of a stream passing by without a glance.
Ripples of water dancing past, splashing—
or laughing?

When the moan of the wind wanders
through this canyon and presses on,
this vacuum of silence, these remnants
of the memory of your voice, your laughter
drift like the windborne seeds of our
dandelion summers across the sky-pierced
loneliness of what we could never be.

They say time heals all wounds, but
does it not also canyon the fragile
clay of human hearts?
Your answer can never be the echo
of a yes that never was…

Thursday, March 23, 2017
Wounds Poems: 93 / 500
Topic(s) of this poem: life,loss,love
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COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Denis Mair 02 April 2017

To me the aftermath of a close relationship resembles a pile of ruins crumbling on the landscape of life. This personal metaphor is my inner shorthand for that difficult loss. I never really see those ruins, but I try to imagine them as picturesque. My image imposes the work of human hands on the landscape, but in your poem, landscape itself speaks to you of what was lost. You read a landform shaped by sedimentation and erosion. For me your poem resonates deeply because it parallels yet contrasts with my own inner image. I give it a 10 and a fave.

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Seamus O Brian 03 April 2017

Denis, thank you for your very insightful and introspective reply. It is always refreshing to see a piece through the lens of another's experience. I can very much relate to the visual of ruins on the landscape of our own experience. A vivid representation, Denis. Thank you! !

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Bharati Nayak 26 March 2017

The echoes of wounded heart expressed so powerfully, in such poetic words ! ! ! This tortuous canyon coiling its jagged edges razors through the sinewed sediments, deluvinations of painful fomentations plowing through acres of rock and soil and the sinking ache of a heart stranded, a single boulder brooding over the center of a stream passing by without a glance. Ripples of water dancing past, splashing— or laughing ?

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Seamus O Brian 03 April 2017

Greetings, dear Bharati! ! I have been away again, and once more I am delighted to return and find your kind words. Yes, the deeper the impression upon the heart, the more volume there is to draw from. Blessings, my friend!

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Freni Karaluthara 21 February 2019

Echo of Silence I like it and can hear it. It facinated me always. I have two Poems on Silence. I invite to read them if you have little time. https: //www.poemhunter.com/poem/silent-presence/ https: //www.poemhunter.com/poem/he-dwells-in-sheer-silence/

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Deep Paul 08 April 2018

They say time heals all wounds, but does it not also canyon the fragile clay of human hearts? Your answer can never be the echo of a yes that never was…..Beautiful and touching lines.

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Beautiful poem. SEAMUS THANK YOU FOR SHARING MARIO ODEKERKEN

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Tom Allport 07 May 2017

a wonderful poem of remembering nature at it's best written with a sad heart of lost loves nest? .............superbly written.

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Glen Kappy 15 April 2017

Neal, Don't know if this is my first or second time with this one, but what stands out When the moan of the wind wanders through the canyon and presses on, the vacuum of silence... This is a vivid picture for me. It brings to mind my experience descending into the Grand Canyon. And this They say time heals all wounds, but but does it not canyon... Canyon is a great verb. Holding first to beauty in this bittersweet existence, Glen

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Seamus O Brian 15 April 2017

Greetings, Glen! Always good to come back and find your incisive thoughts and responses. Thanks again, and hope that all is well with you! Now that I finally have a respite of time, I will pop over and see what you have been up to. :) S

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