Freedom Poem by amir mohammad islami chalandar


Do not hop me please! !

in my heart there is an airport

full of vapor, snow and sleet! !

in each train of your eye

break the love

there are your freedom stations

after the rails of my body! ! !

passenger, you are like a terminal

in my mind and imaginations

your spirit bag,

your luggages and outfits

your destination is

the great freedom village.

i am an evangelic,

enunciating your village freedom.

Denis Martindale 06 June 2014

I was interested in the word evangelic, rather than the expected word being evangelist. We know that the word angelic means like an angel, so it had an extra meaning to me in this context. The title is Freedom and perhaps I would have called it Expectations since we each have expectations of each other, perhaps in hoping for fair play one to the other. On another level, I see the baggage that is mentioned as what some would call our emotional baggage. It's something that we get used to carrying around with us wherever we travel, even in our present and future relationships. The greatest freedom is not the living in the now and doing anything and everything we like, but doing what God likes for us and through us. The poet's freedom is poetic licence and the choosing of the words can be as free as you like, but when offering the poetry to the world and to posterity, ought we not to try to improve ourselves and apply more apt words and phrases fitting to the modern day and for the global village? But if we are all things to all people, do we not lose that personal touch and our perspective of our own culture? So freedom isn't fully freedom after all. It's that fine line of compromise upon which discretion is the better part of valour and we please some of the people some of the time...

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Tirupathi Chandrupatla 06 June 2014

There is freedom in taking flight in the air not guided on the rail. Beautifully said. Thank you for your nice comment about my poems.

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Savita Tyagi 07 June 2014

Great expressions in abstract images. Fits perfectly in new age poetry. Enjoyed reading it.

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Ken E Hall 19 October 2014

Freedom the jewel of life great words in this poem we need more of them like this...regards

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Aftab Alam Khursheed 09 July 2014

love the quest for freedom lovely write brother

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Akhtar Jawad 08 June 2014

You are free to think, But when you ink, It should be moderate, And should not be too delicate. A nice poem.

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Salini Nair 08 June 2014

very it.............

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Richard Beevor 08 June 2014

Great imagery, the use of being to express the need to be free, marvellous

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