DEEPANSHU MALIK


Girl Look What You've Done To Me - Poem by DEEPANSHU MALIK

WALKING HOME AND TALKING ROADS
FEELING LIKE I LOSING YOU FROM MY LIFE
EVERYTIME I TRY TO CLOSE TO YOU,
WHY DOES DESTINY KICKS ME ALL THE TIME?
SO I STOP EVEN TRYING FOR YOU,
AND I WANT TO MOVE ON WITH MY LIFE
BUT, HOW CAN I FORGET YOUR PRESENCE IN MY MIND.
THATS WHY
I TAKE THE DRUGS TO FORGET THIS PAIN,
YOUR LOVE IS KILLING ME, DAY BY DAY

YOUR LOVE IS LIKE A PAIN......
THATS REMINDS ME I AM FAIL

EVERY ROAD TAKES ME TO Y0UR HOME,
EVERY NIGHT I SING YOUR SONG
BUT WHEN I SEE, MY FACE IN THE MIRROR,
MY REFLECTION SAYS'I AM THE ONLY ONE THAT YOU HATE THE MOST'

I KNOW ITS MY MISTAKE, JUST GIVE ME A BREAK
TO FIX ALL THE THINGS, BUT I KNOW ITS TOO LATE

COZ YOUR LOVE IS LIKE A PAIN
THATS REMINDS ME I AM FAIL

Topic(s) of this poem: heartbroken, love

Form: Free Verse


Comments about Girl Look What You've Done To Me by DEEPANSHU MALIK

  • Hazel Durham (9/22/2015 7:06:00 AM)


    Very promising start, you write with great honesty but you would need to improve your English, but you write from your heart and I'm looking forward to reading more of your poems!
    Thank you for sharing and I'm sorry for taking so long to read your poem I have just been busy.
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    Deepanshu Malik Deepanshu Malik (9/24/2015 9:54:00 AM)

    thanx for reading this poem hazel, and for suggestion also

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  • Charity Nduhiu (9/14/2015 3:01:00 AM)


    Though this love is like pain to you, sometimes its healthy to let go may be just may be she never loved you. Nice start Malik (Report) Reply

    Deepanshu Malik Deepanshu Malik (9/14/2015 9:05:00 AM)

    thanx nduhiu for reading this poem

  • Kim Barney (9/13/2015 9:48:00 AM)


    Amen to what Kelly Kurt said:
    The message is understandable but the English needs a lot of improvement. I know it's hard when you are trying to write in a language that is other than your native one.
    And leave the drugs alone if you really are using them. They will destroy you, body and spirit.
    Also, please read Poem Hunter's rules for publishing poetry. If I remember correctly, one of the rules says not to use all capital letters.
    Keep writing. You will get better and better.
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    Deepanshu Malik Deepanshu Malik (9/14/2015 9:05:00 AM)

    thanx for the suggestion barney

  • Kelly Kurt (9/12/2015 11:57:00 PM)


    The message is clear but the English needs some work.
    I hope you aren't abusing drugs to mask pain.
    Please keep writing.
    Peace
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    Deepanshu Malik Deepanshu Malik (9/13/2015 12:11:00 AM)

    thanx for reading this and for suggestion also

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, September 12, 2015

Poem Edited: Thursday, September 24, 2015


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