How about writing a story
My child says -Mama,
Write stories and fairy tales,
Do you know
How much Harry Potter sales?
Yes, my child, I will
I will write a story you will love
But do you know,
The story is so vast
It requires thousand and thousand words,
They come and get struck at my throat,
Then they squeeze and dissolve
And come through my eyes
And shine at a corner
Like a drop of tear,
You know, when they fall
They fall like poems,
On a blank paper.
And come through my eyes And shine at a corner Like a drop of tear, You know, when they fall They fall like poems, On a blank paper. Beautiful lines dear Apa. Keep up such innovative poems. 10++++ for this new type. Regards SUBHAS
As to clubbed words I thought they were deliberate for an effect and then your poem also said so (They comeand getstruck atmythroat) . Any way the subtlety of the piece is striking. But I may be wrong. This type is not my genre, and as an outsider I can only comment. But I really liked the ending.
p.s. Thanks foraddingthePoet'sNotesasisuggestedthatyoudo! ! ! ha ha. bri :) p.p.s. So, Bharati, how much money have you AND your son made by selling your story? ? ?
Yes, as per your suggestion I have added Poet's note.I hope, it helps readers.
(cont.) ...! ! ! MY BRAIN MUST BE ROTTING! ! ha ha (NOT!) i completely forgot i'd read this (maybe not totally forgotten) , and noticed in a comment response from Bharati, as i was looking over the poem comments, that i HAD commented already! ! ! not only THAT, but i'd also said i'd use this poem in my/our March 2018 showcase of poems! ! i did some checking and found it in the showcase, with spaces between words. :) bri
I must recommend all readers to read poems of Bri Edward's showcase.Each month Bri publishes poems of other poets of Poem Hunter Site.Readers will surely be delighted once they visit Show case poems.
do you mean the title isn't even meant to be clubbed? ? ? i like the title as it is here, but i DID WONDER about much of the rest. i, too, have had such problems, but not so seriously as you seem to have had! ! i suggest that the word you want to use is clumped, BUT maybe PH should be CLUBBED if they are responsible! ! ! (continued) ...
Thank you Bri Edwards for reading and commenting on this poem.The title of the poem after being clubbed together looks like a new English word and may attract more readers out of curiosity.
For many days I could not give individual reply to comments.I thought Poem Hunter has changed rules and replied in comment box.Now I find that i can reply individually.Thank you Akhtar Jawadji, Susan Williams, Subhas Chandra Chakra, Seamus O Brian, Madam Geeta Radhakrisna Menon, Bri Edwards, Anil Ku.Panda and Glen Kappy for your encouraging words.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Bharati, such a good write...10+++