Like the everyday fading scar
Dying fragrance of a plucked flower
Waning of new winter moon
Unwinding thread from a dancing spool
Sand dunes washed away by the sea
Golden leaves falling from an autumn tree
Crimson dye turning pale
Boat drowning, weary to sail
Diminishing vigour of a yowl
Disappearing shadow of old from the wall
Past sinking in the present river
Chasing the sea to find its future bower
Oh! I lost her worth like a naked tree
Coz I always found her close to me.
agree with Judith.! ! So many images. flashing.. as they fade away..Nice array of images and thoughts. Nicely portrayed! thank you for sharing! ! 10++
Thought-provoking poem. Lots of images created in the mind. Thanks for sharing.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Hi Jaya, Marvelous flow of images, so sublime and much above the words do convey. The mood of loss of love and the melancholy feeling aptly pictured. In minimum words. The talent of the poet is more evident in retaining the brevity of the poem, which she allows free and eloquent flow of emotions, through the imagery that spreads their wings. Loved these lines: Sand dunes washed away by the sea Golden leaves falling from an autumn tree Sand dunes that are marks of deserts get washed away by the waves of sea? The seas encroaching the lands and run-over the deserts, inundating them? Such wildish images! ! And the Golden leaves falling from the trees: Totally in contrast with the first line: : : : A sea-wave running over a sand dune with a roar, has to go back to the sea in eerie silence. And the sand dune though washed away for the time-being, will raise its head again, when sun dries it up and wind blows. : : : But a leaf falling from the tree does so SILENTLY; no roar there. And it is a golden leaf- grown golden by age. So it is natural for it to be discarded by the tree (the tree representing life, leaf representing any living thing including man, and fall of course, the inevitable death) . The most important contrast is that, the fall of leaf is not retracable. It is a one-way road. A journey of no return. Wonderful! ! ! ! 100+++
thanks a lot.....sir what to say....all i can say is i have enjoyed reading your comment more than penning my poem this time....u have dived too deep into my words...it feels so beautiful.....now i think someone has truely said, a poet takes no qualms to appreciate other poet. thank you