! Illusion Poem by Vidyadhar Durgekar
! Illusion
Blossoming far on faint horizon,
Hope in its fake material realm,
In the thoughts hidden dimension,
Of virtual imagery macrocosm;
Deceptive celluloid human face,
Pretending unnatural spiritual farce,
Fake friendship tempting to be true,
Covering with veil of values scarce;
Living Life in reckless haste,
On a shadowy grinding stone,
With apparent hopes, fluid as paste,
Under influence of wasteful clone;
Truth mundane is absolute apparent,
Believing unpretentiously sacrosanct,
Searching deep with spiritual penance,
Finding void in flesh and skeleton tenant;
Hypocritical opportunity thunder,
Pouring in life’s chance showers,
Decorating the delicate soul under,
With a fictitious Rainbow cover;
Resigning to devout faith and trust.
Following essence of divine light,
To lead virtuous life without waste,
Under metaphysical life’s pseudo twist;
This poem is excellent and you have a great command of the English language. Just some nitpicks. Wasteful clone - a dictator? I don't understand that phrase. But don't worry, some poems are not meant to be 100% understood. They spring from the unconscious and one must 'feed' the unconscious by reading poetry everyday. Read a poet you love and figure out why; then read a poet you hate and do the same. 'Flesh and skeleton tenant' - wonderful! I never heard anything like that before. You may want to change the line that ends 'absolute apparent' to absolutely apparent. But I think that's up to you, depending on voice or whatever YOU mean. You used 2 forms of the same word. Unless there's a special emphasis needed, I think you should use either 'waste' and 'wasteful' and then find another word for one of them. Very well executed. Kaye
Life itself is an illusion and it can give a superficial glow.. like a mirage shines on the non reachable horizon.. a very well written poem with good metaphors. 10 from me Rema
A creative and compelling composition written in persuasive poetic expressions with artistic brilliance. A work of an intricate mind.
Decorating the delicate soul under, With a fictitious Rainbow cover; Wonderful poem composed and shared really. Each line expresses deep meaning. Beautiful one and heart touching.
As in Solitude, a good idea and thoughtful images are a little let down by the irregular rhymes (v.1, lines 1/3; v.2, lines 2/4 don't rhyme as the sound is different; v.3, lines 1/3 and 2/4; v.4 lines 1/4; v.5, lies 1/3; v.6, lines 1/3/4 almost rhyme) . But the difference between appearance and reality (does the reference to 'celluloid' mean you are looking at a film?) , between the artificial and the natural, is brought out well.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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Much of our lives see-saw on the threading of reality & surreality....Our minds have a natural penchant to air towards the chimeric, as opposed to logic...especially in crisis, when we shuffle to avade the inevitable....Such a fine line indeed....and very well depicted, here...Nice Work. ~ FjR ~