In Haiku/ Senryu - My Complete Story Poem by Poetic Sky

In Haiku/ Senryu - My Complete Story

Rating: 5.0


mountains high and grand,
valleys low and serene stand,
river flows between.

stars twinkle above,
moon shines brightly in the sky,
night spreads its embrace.

pain grips my heart tight,
sorrow clouds my mind each night,
desist from this fight.

love and hate collide,
a rollercoaster inside,
torn apart, no guide.

but in the end, we see,
that love and hate can both be,
realms of complexity.

Tuesday, June 6, 2023
Topic(s) of this poem: human life,haiku
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
This is my attempt to write a complete story using Haiku/ Senryu format with 5-7-5 syllable, the nature and human life go hand-in-hand.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Rajan T Renganathan 06 June 2023

2 on nature 2 on self and pain this is what I like about your poems. Good Job Poetic Sky.

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All the best to your new venture of haiku series of your story. May your pen (or fingers?) be blessed with Godspeed!

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M. Asim Nehal 07 June 2023

love and hate collide, a rollercoaster inside, torn apart, no guide.

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Nabakishore Dash 07 June 2023

Awesome, nice imagery and worth being visited again and again.

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MAHTAB BANGALEE 05 July 2023

love and hate-both are the grease oil of life! - nice to read your as three liners; congrats for being selected this as POD

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Bri Edwards 18 October 2023

And I liked Poet's Notes. : ) bri

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Bri Edwards 18 October 2023

I LOVE your poem. I like that you did NOT force yourself to rhyme throughout, though I DO appreciate good rhyming, which you had. I LOVE the poem and give it 5 stars. *****

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Bri Edwards 18 October 2023

desist: 1 definition: 'To cease to proceed or act; to stop; to forbear; -- often with from.' I won't challenge myself to write such a restricting, technically, poem! ;) Nice job.

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 05 July 2023

Wonderful depiction of the intricacies of life and love adorned with the beauty and wonders of nature. A well crafted and executed haiku. Top Marks!

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Ricky M 05 July 2023

Worthy of n=being selection POTD.

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