Valerie Dohren

Gold Star - 7,071 Points (13 January 1947 / Southport)

Is That Okay..... - Poem by Valerie Dohren

Oh fare thee well
I`m off to hell -
A place may be
Reserved for me

But then, I smile,
I`ll wait awhile -
In case there`s space
In heaven`s place

But then, maybe
There`s nowhere free -
So here I`ll stay
Is that okay?

Comments about Is That Okay..... by Valerie Dohren

  • (11/18/2012 1:20:00 AM)

    No, no! Don't go there. Please stay - in case there`s space in heaven`s place. I think you'll be be glad you did. Keep writing and inspiring Val. Thanks. (Report) Reply

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  • John Brown (8/20/2012 2:20:00 PM)

    Hee Hee Hee. This tickled me. (Report) Reply

  • (8/20/2012 6:38:00 AM)

    Yah, that's okay-for many a day. Constance Yost (Report) Reply

  • Juan Olivarez (4/22/2012 7:05:00 PM)

    hearted and very witty. Well done. (Report) Reply

  • (4/21/2012 8:04:00 AM)

    Ah heaven and hell, what a spell, stay here with us just as well and amongst your poet kith and kin do dwell, until your feet begin to smell and distant grows that final knell and unto that role call you steal, to that finite fading peal. 

    Indeed dear lady sit and write and we will grow by your poetic light and rage, rage against the dying of the light.
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  • Adeline Foster (4/17/2012 5:03:00 PM)

    Cute, cute and well expressed. Read mine - Indebted -
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  • Neela Nath Das (4/17/2012 10:16:00 AM)

    Your poem has brought heaven near.Nice. Great sense of humor! (Report) Reply

  • (4/16/2012 4:55:00 PM)

    In three short stanzas you have summed up all of the options, glad to hear that you've chosen the later, great piece of writing as always..... (Report) Reply

  • (4/15/2012 2:40:00 PM)

    Ha, sorry for taking the last place in Hell- but I guess we should all stay here as long as possible, it's too interesting to forego, thanks for the laugh! (Report) Reply

  • (4/15/2012 2:14:00 PM)

    You made this old man laugh.A brief, cute and great flowinfg poem..Worth a ten (Report) Reply

  • Heather Wilson (4/13/2012 8:45:00 AM)

    O K with me Val, hope you stay a good long time. (Report) Reply

  • Diane Hine (4/13/2012 6:14:00 AM)

    You should definitely stick around- those other places sound dead boring.
    Fun poem!
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  • (4/13/2012 6:12:00 AM)

    Like it, a really great flowing poem. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, April 13, 2012

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