A man called his wife for a hug
Pat came the reply; Honey, I love you but there is a bug
to give you a hug don’t put stress
You are a wrestler and I am a poetess
I want pain in heart and in soul not in body.
Limerick - 1 - Poem by M. Asim Nehal A man called his wife for a hug Pat came the reply; Honey, I love you but there is a bug to give you a hug don’t put stress You are a wrestler and I am a poetess I want pain in heart and in soul not in body. I like your PH ‘bio’. but I’m not believing that this ‘limerick’ actually follows the guidelines/rules of writing a limerick which I use/am aware of OTHERWISE I enjoy the message in your poem. I find it interesting that you say/(imply) that “poetess” (and perhaps other poets) “want pain in heart and in soul”. I suppose that is easily-imagined while reading some poetry, but it is certainly NOT me. I want laughter! ! maybe a bit of wisdom to show through from time to time also. THIS is how I choose to change what you began. PARDON ME; I can’t help myself! [note that I have used different meter and rhyme scheme from yours] Called On The Rug** A man called his wife for a hug. “ I love you but there is a bug” … came my wife’s reply. And as much …..as I did try, she would not lie with me on our rug! =================================== **call on the carpet........THE DEFINITION BELOW REALLY DOES NOT FIT THE POEM, but i thought it interesting. Also found in: Dictionary/thesaurus, Wikipedia. call someone on the carpet and haul someone on the carpet Fig. to reprimand a person. (When done by someone of clear superiority. Haul is stronger than call.) One more error like that and the big boss will call you on the carpet. I'm sorry it went wrong. I really hope the regional manager doesn't call me on the carpet again. See also: call, carpet, on, the McGraw-Hill Dictionary of American Idioms and Phrasal Verbs. © 2002 by The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc. call on the carpet Summon for a scolding or rebuke, as in Suspecting a leak to the press, the governor called his press secretary on the carpet. This term began as on the carpet, which in the early 1700s referred to a cloth (carpet) covering a conference table and therefore came to mean under consideration or discussion. In 19th-century America, however, carpet meant floor covering, and the expression, first recorded in 1902, alluded to being called before or reprimanded by a person rich or powerful enough to have a carpet. “ ============================================== thanks for sharing. bri :) p.s. Who do you think taught Valsa all she knows about writing limericks! ! ! ? ? WHO, Who, who? :) :)
A satire I really enjoyed, crafty Limerick in very first attempt and great tribute to Valsa.
Enjoyed reading this Limerick which happens to be the first written by you. Congrats.
Awesome awesome! the poem is carrying a very serious message in the form of mocking, on man-woman relationship. loved it.10
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Valsa is magnificent at the form. I liked the message in this one, Mohammed. Inspiration for poetry by heart and soul anguish but physical pain is not wanted as a muse