Lonliness Comments

Great poem, a good read

You write about sadness with such conviction. Line breaks are excused by the smooth flow on loneliness.

I feel it.Nicely written.

I think your teacher is quite right.. I've only 1 note to say: you describe ''petrichor'' in a 'non-descriptive' way.. ''Loneliness smells like the damp air after a rain'' but petrichor is usually a pleasant smell.. at least in the countryside.. ;) Cheers BTW.. I like 'loneliness'.. and I'm used to be alone.. but I'm not in my teens anymore.. :)

is hard to read and full of a simile.