Lonliness Poem by Julianna McLeod (LaPlante)
Lonliness
Loneliness is the color of a stand-alone shade, like black, grey or white. Loneliness smells like the damp air after a rain and tastes like a sandwich made only of bread. It looks like the last leaf on a tree at the end of Autumn. Loneliness feels like you are standing alone in a world filled with millions.
Plus this is a 5 senses poem which is best for children and beginners to write so I really did not think it would be good enough. There are no line breaks in this poem. Please tell me what you think.
You write about sadness with such conviction. Line breaks are excused by the smooth flow on loneliness.
I think your teacher is quite right.. I've only 1 note to say: you describe ''petrichor'' in a 'non-descriptive' way.. ''Loneliness smells like the damp air after a rain'' but petrichor is usually a pleasant smell.. at least in the countryside.. ;) Cheers BTW.. I like 'loneliness'.. and I'm used to be alone.. but I'm not in my teens anymore.. :)
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/25/2024 11:06:47 PM # 1.0.0.1119
Great poem, a good read