Love kills, and risky love is never praised from above
stick out your head too far, gravity's call can make you fall
feelin' on top never wantin' it to stop
when you plummet, when you drop, brain process is gonna halt
live off your emotions, in sticky situations
never stopped the commotion
goin insane now your weak side is showin
standing outside, piles of your clothes with
a note that say 'I cheated and it's over! '
you know it's gonna be a while til your sober
know what you are drinking multiplying problems
but you drink some more cause you know you can't solve em
wanna go see your love tell her she's your world
cruise on over to her spot see another car in her lot
your heart drops then again you lose your thought
kick down the door and bang bang your loves shot
I don't recommend this kind of love, dear poet...but this is quite an impressive write for someone your age. Emotion well expressed!
Dam i like this poem you speak of love in a way that someone our age should not be able to.... Great write keep writing
William Blake is not only famous poet, but a great writer of short poem in, my heart felt that your style would be another William, so beautiful, just feel what every time you make a poem....it’s in you my friend, the wisdom of time and the power of the moment....go on...God bless...a 10+++++
Keep up the good work i wanna hear some more ur a talented writer
you really need to write what comes from the heart, if this is it thats great write more, but you and i both know its not. i liked the poem, but it sunded a bit forced.
Well Anthony-or Brandon, You're (not your) just seventeen, but I wrote better poems than this when I was 12. That's because the nuns taught me grammar. As for the hip hop story, it's a cliché that's been seen hundreds of times. As for the verse, you're rhyming off the top of your head. There's no structure to the lines or the rhyme, only the static of forced rhythm. Don't tell me this is the best our 'z' generation can do. Surely Armageddon is upon us!
the attitude and style of this poem coincide well...you brought out your mind truely well...keep writing
Your writing and rhyme stlye seems to me to have a rap influence. Good work.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
wow good job keep up the good work i love the way you add detail to it