Message To Cupid Poem by David Harris
Message To Cupid
Cupid fire your arrow swiftly,
Through someone else’s heart.
Mine has been broken enough,
to want to begin again.
Find someone else.
So they can enjoy loves blessing
and the good times ahead.
For me, you can come back again,
but just not yet.
David: I like the sentiment here: Some rewrite suggestions: L1: I would remove 'swiftly' and the comma. L2: Lower case for 'through'. Semicolon after 'heart.' L3: Lower case for 'mine' and remove comma at the end of that line. L4: That line should probably be dropped down for a new stanza and remove the ending comma. L5: lower case there. Overall I like this one, David, and I think if you rewrite it, you will like it better, too. best, diva
Not sure Cupid will listen.... once he has his arrows set he doesn't like to let up... But I know what you mean... sometimes we just want to sit back and let our wounded heart heal a little before entering the fray again... Love and Peace Alison
David this is a lovely poem, I guess that is exactly where I'm coming from as of late. Who knows maybe there will be a time when I'm ready for love again, but right now I'm still missing my true love. This is a small poem but says a lot to those who have been hurt by those they love or have lost their one true love. A precious little poem David, Thankyou once again.---Melvina---
Sad that you are pushing love away. Maybe it's too painful for you right now? A different angle on a love poem here, David. Nice one.... Love, Fran xx
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It does not work that way my friend... thank god...