Diane Hine

Silver Star - 4,143 Points (25 July 1956)

Misgivings - Poem by Diane Hine

Misgivings assembled in the bedroom every night.
They were obscene but had no form.
Mr Jones woke up and waited for the morning
photon squad to disassemble them.

One night, a misgiving mutated into a monster.
The photons delivered the bad news to Mr Jones.
The monster was sitting cross-legged on the end of
the bed, carving graffiti into the walnut footboard.
Mr Jones kicked his feet.
Feathers erupted from holes in the paisley eiderdown.
The monster cooed, flapping its hands in the flurry.
Mr Jones' feet began to cool.
The monster took up permanent residence.
Mr Jones bought an electric blanket.

A year passed, two. Eventually
a second misgiving materialized into a monster.
This one squatted above the window on the pelmet
and pissed, darkening the pencil-pleated drapery.
Mr Jones was affronted.
The monster stifled a giggle, but carried on pissing.
It too took up permanent residence.
Mr Jones bought air freshener.

Several months passed.
Mr Jones attempted to control his misgivings.
Of course that didn't work.

The cheval mirror's swivel hinge began to squeak.
Mr Jones applied oil.
The oil stained the palmette-patterned rug.
The squeak became more insistent until
Mr Jones understood. A misgiving had slipped into
the envelope of air between glass and wood
and metamorphosed into a third monster.
It began scraping away layered silver and became
visible by degrees through crosshatched clear glass.
Mr Jones had never imagined anything so ugly.
Noticing Mr Jones, the monster pulled a monster face
and squashed it against the glass
but since it was already maximally gross
the result was, if anything, an improvement.

It was a good joke.
The other monsters laughed.
Mr Jones was glad they all had a sense of humour.
It made them easier to live with.

Topic(s) of this poem: life

Comments about Misgivings by Diane Hine

  • (8/1/2015 10:57:00 AM)

    Very enjoyable read. An imaginative narrative. (Report) Reply

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  • Jacqueline Nash (10/5/2014 9:54:00 AM)

    Great poem.I suppose if you can't beat them, join them. Very funny but I think I'll be checking my bedroom for monsters tonight. (Report) Reply

  • (10/3/2014 5:54:00 AM)

    You've a wonderful imagination, Diane. Skillful use of vocabulary. An enjoyable read, very humorous. Well done. (Report) Reply

  • Daniel Brick (9/12/2014 10:43:00 AM)

    Misgivings - we all have them, and probably stash in a small closet in the back of memory. B-U-T Mr. Jones's experience shows our vulnerability. What startled me in this poem was the casualness, even intimacy of the relationship of the man and his misgivings. He could say of these creatures what Prospero finally admits about Caliban: THIS THING OF DARKNESS I ACKNOWLEDGE MINE. How does Mr. Jones react? He accomodates, he gets to know them, he lives parallel to them. It's quietly frightening. And your amazing light touches of humor make it all the more real - and unavoidably disturbing. This is a remarkable poem, it's in my head. (Report) Reply

  • Lyn Paul (9/6/2014 9:45:00 PM)

    Thank you Diane. You really have put so much into Misgiving. Your Imagination and your humour are incredible.
    As Valsa said, you know how to make us laugh
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  • Valsa George (9/5/2014 2:52:00 AM)

    I always wonder how such crazy ideas come to your head Diane! I feel you are the Queen of the 'unthought'! You make people think and laugh! As Mr Jones believe, it is easier to live with those having a sense of humour! ! I don't know if it is easier to live with them, but sure it is a pleasure having them around! (Report) Reply

  • Jacqueline Nash (9/4/2014 10:42:00 AM)

    A very good humorous poem and story, it made me laugh, especially the last verse. Well done. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, September 4, 2014

Poem Edited: Thursday, September 4, 2014

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