Monster Of The Sea Poem by Donna Nimmo

Monster Of The Sea



The monster of the sea once more rears her ugly head
She rushes in once more to terrorize, to drink the blood of the dead
Will totally envelop all within her her reach, she stays till all is gone
Washing into the sea all life, winds howling her horror song

We prepare for her but then she comes sea lashing out to all
We run and hide and cower into the corners knowing we might fall
She lashes out for hours, washing out to sea everything within her reach
We pick up all the pieces, but she'll come again we teach

In this fight with this monster, we know she wins
But maybe we have time, once more before her ugly head spins
We will rebuild all that's lost, the lives can't be reclaimed
But this time Ike will be this monster's name

So don't build on the coast, she 'll sneak up on you again
Next time it might be you when she starts to spin
Swallowed up by the deep blue sea
One thing I know for sure is it won't be me!
By Dogs4donna


© 2008 Dogs4donna (All rights reserved)

COMMENTS OF THE POEM

Dear Donna Nimmo, you have a talent, imagination and sensitivity. Enough for one to write good poems. I give to your poem a grade of 8+. If you have omitted the last paragraph completely the grade would be 10. Why? Because you have changed the direction, the main target, sewarching for a second. Your target was to stop at: 'In this fight with this monster, we know she wins / But maybe we have time, once more before her ugly head spins' giving a great hope and a signal for the others to keep on fighting the ugly monster, whatever the resuld would be. You are a gifted poet..but first think strategically each one of yoour poems. Joseph Josephides Member of the International Society of Poets (ISP) Int.Lib.Poetry awarded

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