Pain Poem by GREENWOLFE 1962


Rating: 4.8

I set myself a task today,
To write of pain in rhyme.
Of the love I lost so long ago,
Remembered for all time.

The pain is not forgotten
Around my broken heart.
For even if I love again,
It's chained around each part.

The pain that had been pleasure
Before she ran away,
Was changed in just an instant,
Like sand to solid clay.

I shivered and I cringed in pain,
My heart to cold hard clay.
To change me from the boy I was
And the man I'm not today.

The pain had soon consumed my life,
My dreams in darkness too.
My anger and my sorrow,
My hate for the world I knew.

It's only bitter that I taste
And only grey I see.
And when lovers warm each other still
It brings a chill to me.

Once I tried to release my chains
That held my love so true.
I actually found someone to give
A cold-chained loving to.

But alas! It ended as before
With a chain around each part.
And now my love lies chilled forever
At the bottom of a broken heart.

Existential Despair 01 August 2008

You achieved your goal of expressing pain in a rhyme in way that cannot be matched, a lovely write of the tragic ''rejected love''...thnx

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Heather Milks 29 July 2008

Alas my dear Greenwolfe... the lesson of acceptance. What pains you? Her absence or her rejection? The loss of her or the denial of you? Are the demons in your dreams hunting you or are you hunting them? I Like!

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Debra Smiles 25 July 2008

i spent along time looking for a poem that i could relate to when it came to the pain i feel.. i started writing about my pain as well but this poem said it all .. i found the poem i've been looking for... ~debra

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V Ramkissoon 02 July 2008

i admire your work. very talented individual with deep thought u are. stay blessed. :)

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Robert Miller 30 June 2008

Writing of pain in rhyme - what a task, but you have executed it very well. Nicely done!

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Cristy Upshaw 08 June 2009

I still you are many others favorite, as well as mine. your words always draw the reader in and compell them to read over and over, wanting more. such greatness in your pen.

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It is amazing. reads perfectly. read it thrice. good piece

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Ivan Alvarez 09 September 2008

This is a good to the heart poem it got to me man you know your stuff... keep writing Pain of love

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Nathaniel Booker 06 September 2008

Mission Accomplished, truly my friend... I browsed through your poetry just looking for something that others hadn't taken a real shining to or notice of that I might. Not surprising that there is not one of your pieces that hasn't truly touched its readers... Beautiful stuff my friend, even when it's about... Pain Be Well

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Moana Tuigamala 05 September 2008

you can surely write my did a nice job there expressing your feelings. splendid.

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