Painful Road Poem by Jacques Sprenkie Mateya

like this one a lot... the last three lines are awesome!

it somehow strikes a chord, structured well, i like it.. :)

Good poem. But i still find it difficult to under ur point.

I like it, nicely done! ! !

Well written, I was really engaged with the pain of reading this poem which is always in both a readers and poets perspective, a truly good aspect. Sublime write.

Good imagery in the poem.Work a bit on the grammar.Thank you

A Lot of imagery and interesting but a bit hard to understand!

Good poem....wish i could get to use imagery dis way... But d problem is.... I dont really understand it! ...

I am having trouble with our sentence structure- which has so much to do with meaning. I love your images even if I don't quite understand them. Who? What? is the I in the last two lines. Beautiful metaphor, but meaning unclear. I am inspired to read more of your work. Juliet

I like this very much.There are some places where the grammar is not quite correct It was a pain to travel That eye tooth can bite the pain? and ease it away like a thief in the night. You have a great gift for imagery, ........... so I think with a little editing it will be a really outstanding poem