Paradise Lost Poem by Vijay Sai R

Paradise Lost

Rating: 4.3

I woke, I woke, with moist eyes,
Oh! I don’t know
that would be my last awakening!
I found myself
in a journey of paradise,
rendezvous with pleasure,
For now I noticed that,
I’ve been discarded
this time,
Oh! no! not again,
I flew to nest, yet again,
in this world of unexpecting soberness,
awaiting to strike at which stroke-
and when!
to be a free bird,
lost out of vision in the blue sky-
Yet another dawn after dusk,
blooming with a dream!

Leena Sharma 28 May 2012

It's really awesome! ! ! ! you have done total justice with the vocabulary and verse! ! ! Appreciable! ! ! ! !

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Ace Of Black Hearts 15 April 2012

The dream of the unfulfilled dream. With a expectation of accomplishments one would deem appropriate. For leaving to your paradise. A awaking to what you yet must do. For a belief to come through. The meaning that can only be known to you. What is it you seen that made you cry? What is it yet holding you prisoner to this world? Where is the key to these shackles and chains. Is it an escape plan? Or is it just moving on? Cheers to such a wonderful poem. It most certainly gets you thinking.

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Aditi Khandelwal 15 April 2012

I really like the poem and the way it ends... This poem is worth nothing less than a 10.. Aditi

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amazing title, good transition in the last lines.And it took some effort to understand it (and i still doubt if i fully do) .but i love abstract poems.this is one of them.keep it up.

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Blossom Mist 16 April 2012

Yet another dawn after dusk, blooming with a dream! ............. simply wonderful! ! ! ! Kudos to you for writing such a beautiful poem! !

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Ankita Bhattacharjee 01 June 2017

A beautiful write! It strikes deep while maintaining the flow and beauty of poetry. An impressive writing style, I must say.😊

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Paul Sebastian 24 September 2015

With dawn another awakening, blooming with a dream. A beautiful write, Vijay! The allusion and your writing style is commendable.

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Leloudia Migdali 31 August 2014

Lovely poem! Nice wording!

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Derek Haughton 28 December 2012

Went to the trouble of writing a sensible critique but this silly website kept insisting that the verification code was wrong although carefully copied several times.

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Tajudeen Shah 29 November 2012

your lost paradise is limited to a dream, and still it is vivaciously fine in its succession. the poetic galore is well-maintained, and deserves much appreciation. the only thing i am not very happy is the limited content. thats ok. may be because, i had great expectation from the title, when you jotted me. wonderful. great to know you, dear Vijay. i just posted a few, if time ever permits, please bless.

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Vijay Sai R

Vijay Sai R

Trichy, South India
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