Poem About Poetry - Adam's First Poem After The Fall

Rating: 3.4

i did not know sin meant chains
so full of them all over my physique
and i did not know the deceptive apple
could lead to this woeful state
only god now is boundless freedom
the paradise boundless freedom
rhe sky boundless freedom
the sea boundless freedom
and to enjoy all these now in chain,
boundless the hurt is the heart
injurious chain on every inch of my physique
that jolts me for their wants
every minute of the day
and to know that i will pass this chain
down to every of my offsprings
binding them down to earth
till they become just dust and bones
chained, chained, chained,
this hateful long chain the devil spawned
that laid end to end
could snake its way round the world
this hateful chain that circles the body
imprisons it, hurtful as red hot iron
how stealthily it works day by day
tightening its grip
till i am wrinkled, bent, and bedridden
till only the last breath would release me
of its curse
this chain that torture me for wordly needs
oh god, how hateful you are
to bind me in these red hot chains! ! !

chain refers to the blood vessels round our body
they indeed resemble a chain
as never did adam experience hunger
until this chain exacted its wants

Joe Breunig 31 May 2006

An intriguing and interesting write; nice job!

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Raynette Eitel 24 May 2005

Very nice, John. I read it because the title intrigued me and was not disappointed. However, I would encourage you to delet the explanation. I believe a poem should stand by itself and should not have to be explained. Your poem does stand by itself, whether every reader 'gets it' or not. Raynette

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Uriah Hamilton 24 May 2005

Very compelling and intense.

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Nasra Al Adawi 24 May 2005

Very different from you other poem that I read I loved the idea and I felt its very creative in its concept...

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