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Loke Kok yee
Poetry Everywhere - Poem by Loke Kok yee
There is poetry in the air and everywhere even in a stringy hair,
But it has to be in rhythm and rhyme then everyone can share.
This I'd been trying to do in spite of many obstacles in the way,
My heart was filled with desire but my thoughts they always stray.
I saw them in the sun the moon and all the stars up in the sky,
I tried to put it in writing but I could not though I knew not why.
Then I saw the majestic mountains with mysteries to be told,
Their story would remain hidden for my heart was unable to unfold.
The forest, rivers and the lakes their beauty waits to be unveiled,
But tried as I did to put these into words but it was to little avail.
The oceans wide and sea so deep with many stories to disclose,
Much to write it should be a breeze but I just could not compose.
I felt hunger I felt pain and many other feelings to be explained,
Easy enough to say it in rhyme but all poetic ideas I was drained.
And the little spider sitting on a rose I'm sure he had a plot to tell,
But my mind remained in a blur empty and all aspirations expelled.
Why other poets are so articulate and wrote poetry with such ease,
Yet when I write, creativity evaporates and all my thoughts would freeze.
‘Tis clear that I am less gifted with the skill other poets be blessed,
But with lots and lots of trying perhaps my flaws can be addressed.
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It's true that there is poetry everywhere... at least there are POSSIBLITIES for poetry everywhere. Almost any item under the sun can be the subject of a poem.
I enjoyed reading this. (Report)Reply
I saw them in the sun the moon and all the stars up in the sky,
I tried to put it in writing but I could not though I knew not why.
Then I saw the majestic mountains with mysteries to be told,
Their story would remain hidden for my heart was unable to unfold....such a brilliant piece of work! My pleasure reading it time and again dear poet! You have very meticulously comprehended the theme and really made it quite insightful! (Report)Reply
Thank you Dr, your comment encourages me to keep writing
I disagree when you say you are less gifted. It is just humility.Your poems are written straight from your heart.Thanks for sharing! (Report)Reply
Thank you Nara, you are so kind in your comments
It's a great piece of poetry on poetry! Simply, I would love to quote first two lines of your poem, There is poetry in the air and everywhere even in a stringy hair/But it has to be in rhythm and rhyme then everyone can share. I relished this beautiful piece of work! (Report)Reply
Thank you Dr Dillip, this was a fun write and I'm so glad that you liked it
a wonderful poem that is a just write on the poetry theme? from stringy hair to nature's most extreme? .............well penned Loke (Report)Reply
One of my early attempts, Thank you Tom,
Captivated by this wonderful poem, the first line just lifted me up like a light breeze on a summers day.
You are gifted and your poem flows with such grace and skill. (Report)Reply
Thank you for your lovely comment, you are most kind.
There is poetry in the air and everywhere even in a stringy hair,
But it has to be in rhythm and rhyme then everyone can share.
This I'd been trying to do in spite of many obstacles in the way,
My heart was filled with desire but my thoughts they always stray.
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Why other poets are so articulate and wrote poetry with such ease,
Yet when I write, creativity evaporates and all my thoughts would freeze.
‘Tis clear that I am less gifted with the skill other poets be blessed,
But with lots and lots of trying perhaps my flaws can be addressed. - - - - The poem showcases the talents of a very gifted writer. (Report)Reply
Thank you Bharati for taking time to read and commenting. You had me walking on air for awhile with your lovely comment.
Tis clear that I am less gifted with the skill other poets be blessed,
But with lots and lots of trying perhaps my flaws can be addressed.
Dear Koke,
May i, with your permission, make a change?
You are gifted,
You are blessed,
You are humble and egoless,
That makes you a wonderful poet!
There is poetry everywhere and you are able to see it,
There are many who cannot smell the fragrance of poetry!
So aren't you a God gifted, sublime poet? (Report)Reply
Thanks Geeta,
I am just an old man with nary a thing to care
Trying to write a little before my mind goes bare
A picture painted in words or some humor to share
Sometimes I get lucky, when it displays poetic flair
But it’s kind comments like yours that kept me from despair
I shall NOT read my previous comments in their entirety. In fact I hardly glanced at them!
Favorite lines:
The last stanza. But I would place a comma after Why. OR change Why to While. Yes! While' will be much clearer. And NO comma after 'While'.
I DO see that I asked,6 months, almost, ago, about using it in a Showcase. I don't recall using it. Perhaps I shall next month unless you send something else; no harm in using it again, especially as it is the 'right' length!
Bri
:) (Report)Reply
ok, my finger was NOT wayward this time! i just read your response (below) to my (only six-months-ago!) 'non-comment'.
this time i SHALL read the poem!
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But it has to be in rhythm and rhyme then everyone can share........well, MAYBE in the stringy hair variety.
but i, THOUGH I ALMOST ALWAYS USE RHYMES, don't care if a poem rhymes or not, as long as i more-or-less understand it AND it sounds 'good' to my heart and soul and butt and heel. oops! i got
carried away! actually it does NOT even have to be understandable to me...or to anyone for me to enjoy
some poems. but they have to have something!
favorite line so far:
Their story will remain hidden for my heart was unable to unfold.
But try as I would to put these into words but it was to little avail. ...too many buts, like a female cheer leading team. wait! what am i talking about! ? i made two mistakes. i meant butts, but a f.c.l.team can never have too many butts! ! !
i've been called to supper. let's see if i can finish before a pot gets tossed at my head.
WOW! I LOVE THE WHOLE THING! did you take lessons at the Bri Edwards Academy of Poetry?
to MyPoemList, and i'd like it in a showcase. what say you?
bri :) (Report)Reply
Sure you can Bri and thanks.
You are no less gifted my friend. All your poems capture my heart.. Here is another one.....Sigh...exactly how it is for me many times Loke. Such a perfect poem for those frustrating seemingly elusive heights of poetry construction and all that indescribable beauty waiting to be penned. (Report)Reply
Thank you my friend, you are always so encouraging.
I did not read this. First of all, it was chosen by a wayward finger; I was trying to click on another. (poem) . Secondly, this poem already has a bunch of comments, so it doesn't need another (comment) .
But since I am here, my friend, I see you recently left some of your cute comments on some of my cute poems thanks; I shall get to them (your comments) some day!
Bri
:)
But I think I CAN be both an atheist AND an agnostic! (Report)Reply
You can but don't say I didn't warn you! ! !
Btw, I like your wayward finger,
You are not less gifted, you are a lovely poet and write nice poems. (Report)Reply
Poetry is the way of life! With the muse of nature. Thanks for sharing this poem with us. (Report)Reply
You delight me so much and let me say it was a great pleasure to read this beautiful poem of yours that hold rhythm and rhyme. Let me also say, I appreciate poetry that rhymes and poetry that in free verse, though all poetry apparently is free verse. I mean it doesn't have to rhyme or carry any formality or rules. I simply like it all and you are a pleasure to read sir. Loving this poem very much...10 plus..... (Report)Reply
I enjoyed your piece! The rhyming was fun and I think we all have poems in our repertoire that speak to the difficulty of writing poetry. But this one flows and it came out spot on. You do have a way with words and a great sense of humor in your writing that I am beginning to appreciate as I read your work. Also, I loved the first line...poetry in stringy hair. You CAN find poetry in basically anything you might observe or imagine. Well done! Thanks for sharing. (Report)Reply
Amazing. You have such creative way with words. Rhythm and rhyme seems to flow naturally. Enjoying the the process of expressing through writing is the most wonderful gift of poetry. Loved it very much. (Report)Reply
You are so humble, I adore and appreciate your poetry and admire your humbleness but soon hopefully you will agree that you are a good poet and well deserve to be called a poet. Keep penning words to the page for all to enjoy Loke Kok Yee...10 (Report)Reply
Yes poems are there everywhere in nature air and water in sun and moon. Very wise and interesting poem shared really....10 (Report)Reply
A very good and entertaining write. You addressed a lot of the issues on becoming
a great poet. You are well on your way. Blessings. (Report)Reply