No love is as overwhelming and as pristine,
As the maiden love of a lass, say of sixteen.
When, like closed petals of a bud she begins to unfold
Herself, blossoming into a fragrant rose or marigold.
She seeks a hand to hold and wants hers as well be held,
In secluded privacy, from the outside world as if shelled.
She wants to love and be loved, to touch and be touched,
Promises never to leave the hand that she fondly clutched.
Standing on the crossroads of childhood and puberty,
She seeks a soul mate, not one who is always flirty.
She feels lonely at home, even in a crowd, or among peers,
Unless with her soul mate who keeps count of her fallen tears.
Promises everything that her soul mate wants her to be,
She herself also demands promises on matters flimsy.
Not realizing that promises are easy to make but difficult to keep,
Broken promises are hard to bear with, easy to make one weep.
Sometimes the lass' love remain held back and suppressed,
When she is wary that her emotions will not be addressed.
Flames of this unexpressed love burn her in slow motion
Whenever she muses over some missed conversation.
Lucky is he who wins the first love of a lass, in solemn trust
Pity on him who misses the offer, or throws it into the dust.
When a life's journey is begun hand in hand with no suspicion,
The two unsuspecting souls will no doubt reach their destination.
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Liked the opening lines of the poem. Powerful lines that describe what pristine love is with great images. The ultimate stanza contains insightful lines, an apt ending for this beautiful poem. Five Stars! To my Poem List.
@Rose Marie Juan-austin, Much obliged, much inspired by your thoughtful comment and the high rating accorded to my humble poem. Eve grateful for picking the poem to your 'MyPoem' basket. My heartfelt greetings and the very best wishes, Rose!
when two unsuspecting souls will no doubt reach their destination'.A great write that suspicion spoils all hope and aspirations.
In secluded privacy from the outside world... there lies the beauty of love in private domain. A great poem on love...loved it. Top score.
A beautiful rhetorical love poem insightfully and movingly brought forth.
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This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
No love is as overwhelming and as pristine, As the maiden love of a lass, say of sixteen. When, like closed petals of a bud she begins to unfold Herself, blossoming into a fragrant rose or marigold. MOUTH WATERING WORDS ENSUE FROM A ROSE BUD TO EXPLODE NOW TIS DUE LOVELY POET YOU FIRST ONE MAYBE YOU READ MY POEMS TOO I LOVE ALL YOUTH