Khairul Ahsan

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Pristine Love - Poem by Khairul Ahsan

No love is as overwhelming and as pristine,
As the maiden love of a lass, say of sixteen.
When, like closed petals of a bud she begins to unfold
Herself, blossoming into a fragrant rose or marigold.

She seeks a hand to hold and wants hers as well be held,
In secluded privacy, from the outside world as if shelled.
She wants to love and be loved, to touch and be touched,
Promises never to leave the hand that she fondly clutched.

Standing on the crossroads of childhood and puberty,
She seeks a soul mate, not one who is always flirty.
She feels lonely at home, even in a crowd, or among peers,
Unless with her soul mate who keeps count of her fallen tears.

Promises everything that her soul mate wants her to be,
She herself also demands promises on matters flimsy.
Not realizing that promises are easy to make but difficult to keep,
Broken promises are hard to bear with, easy to make one weep.

Sometimes the lass' love remain held back and suppressed,
When she is wary that her emotions will not be addressed.
Flames of this unexpressed love burn her in slow motion
Whenever she muses over some missed conversation.

Lucky is he who wins the first love of a lass, in solemn trust
Pity on him who misses the offer, or throws it into the dust.
When a life's journey is begun hand in hand with no suspicion,
The two unsuspecting souls will no doubt reach their destination.

Topic(s) of this poem: love

Poet's Notes about The Poem

Dedicated to all the young lovers, in whose pristine minds love reigns supreme!

26 July 2013
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Comments about Pristine Love by Khairul Ahsan

  • Bani Marathe (3/22/2017 10:53:00 AM)

    Felt like I was flowing in my own story...very subtle and beautifully expressed!! Loved every word!! Beautiful composition!! Thank you (Report) Reply

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  • Rajnish Manga (1/6/2017 4:12:00 AM)

    First Love
    Great poem, by all means. Be it the articulation of thoughts on the subject of teenage love (When, like closed petals of a bud she begins to unfold) , its delectable and artistic presentation, perfect rhyme or its reference to the mental blocks that come in the way of free expression of one's love. Thanks for sharing the same, KA. (Report) Reply

  • (6/12/2016 5:48:00 AM)

    A tender and a beautiful write, thanks for sharing this beautiful write. (Report) Reply

  • Anne Yun (5/21/2016 4:02:00 AM)

    The maiden love of a lass, say of nineteen, that's the story of me. These sentences touched deeply my memory which is still raw and fresh and painful, but no word can describe a pristine love better than meaningful, thank you sir, your words truly remind me of the importance of a pristine heart. (Report) Reply

  • Md. Anisur Rahman (4/17/2016 4:36:00 AM)

    Really great poems.I like this. (Report) Reply

  • Clarence Prince (4/3/2016 2:02:00 PM)

    This is truly a nice love poem: Pristine Love.
    Lucky is he who wins the first love of a lass, in solemn trust
    Yes, lucky he is,
    (Report) Reply

  • Edward Kofi Louis (1/21/2016 4:14:00 AM)

    The journey of love! With faith and hope. Nice work. (Report) Reply

  • Alem Hailu G/kristos (12/25/2015 6:59:00 AM)

    It is savoury and true.It depicts a genuine love many wish to get.I like both the music, architecture and the beef.TFS (Report) Reply

    Khairul Ahsan Khairul Ahsan (12/25/2015 9:22:00 AM)

    Thanks for reading my poem and leaving your thoughtful appreciation there. Much obliged.

  • Shahin Latif (11/29/2015 1:34:00 PM)

    Excellent Ink! I motivated this poem. Thank you so much Khairul Ahsan. Be well always. (Report) Reply

    Khairul Ahsan Khairul Ahsan (12/25/2015 10:26:00 AM)

    Thank you very much, Shahin Latif, for reading my poem and leaving an appreciative comment here. Much obliged.

  • Khairul Ahsan (11/1/2015 12:02:00 PM)

    @Seema Chowdhury,
    In not too many words, you have praised my poem quite adequately. My sincere thanks for that.
    Hope to have your comments on some other pieces as well!
    (Report) Reply

  • Khairul Ahsan (11/1/2015 11:47:00 AM)

    @Maria Sharon Moemise,
    I can't thank you enough for your cogent appraisal of my poem. The rhyme, tempo and the sentiment expressed in the poem has been well appreciated.
    'Your writing just keeps one wanting to continue reading, even when the poem is at its end' - what a wonderful compliment!
    Thank you Maria!
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  • Maria Sharon Moemise (11/1/2015 10:08:00 AM)

    I love how you find it so easy to get your rhyme and tempo in your poetry just right. The sentiment expressed in this poem reminds me a bit of me, back in the day and even now. This poem is indeed a true dedication to lovers young and old. Your writing just keeps one wanting to continue reading, even when the poem is at its end. Great write! ! 👍👍👍 (Report) Reply

  • (10/20/2015 8:51:00 PM)

    Lovely expression and a tender write. (Report) Reply

  • Khairul Ahsan (10/20/2015 2:03:00 PM)

    @Melvina Germain,
    Thank you very much for reading my poem and leaving your thoughtful comment here. I am much inspired.
    (Report) Reply

  • Khairul Ahsan (10/20/2015 8:04:00 AM)

    @Lucifera Santez,
    I am so glad to receive a comment from you after a long spell. Your words on my poem are very warm and generous. I appreciate.
    Thank you.
    (Report) Reply

  • Khairul Ahsan (10/20/2015 7:40:00 AM)

    @Rakhi Jayashankar,
    Thanks for reading my poem and leaving a comment here. It's wonderful to know that your maiden love was successfully converted into your life partner. It must have been a happy journey all through.
    Thanks for appreciating my humble work.
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  • Melvina Germain (10/20/2015 5:28:00 AM)

    Soulmates such as this live a beautiful and trusting life for many, many years...Great insight into the life of an innocent. (Report) Reply

  • Lucifera Santez (10/13/2015 5:55:00 AM)

    it has been quite a time and even after all this time, your poems greet me like an old friend.
    the concept of this poem is something i can understand and easily relate to.
    Such poignant expressions you have used.
    my first love was the fool you've mentioned.
    lovely work.
    (Report) Reply

  • (4/4/2015 11:19:00 AM)

    my maiden love at sixteen is my life partner hence I. could relate to your verses wowww what a poem (Report) Reply

  • Khairul Ahsan (3/1/2015 10:10:00 AM)

    @Cassandra Jasmine
    Thanks for rereading my old poems and complimenting again so generously. Am much inspired.
    ''If more people don't know you, I have no idea whatsoever, just what you have been doing! Or for that matter, what the people around us have been doing.' - I too am clueless!
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Poem Submitted: Friday, July 26, 2013

Poem Edited: Tuesday, March 11, 2014

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