let me think about that moment
let me realize every move I did it
...
it happened so slow
as feathers blow
you can see every move
and its dance on the air door
....
I saw a fallen apple and I caught it.
there is only one thing I can take it
there are a lot to think about them
there are many I have to change them
taking their life
and I will rule this World
and there will be
no vaillians living around
I Raised my hand trying to write
my name in the Damn Death Note
a lot of things happened and eclipsced
a broken bridge showed up with ropes flaccid
people appeared to let me fall
at this wide creepy valley hole
I gave up
there was no choice
you can't deter them away
there was no time to write their names
a freeky smile
from the shinigami
then I knew this is the Time
my legend is becoming so ugly
I killed many people in the name
of the god who Justifies
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Note:
Shinigami = it is a japanese word I'm not sure of its spelling
it means the god of Death, , , or what we call it as the angle of Death
the name of the novel which I borrowed from it some ideas is Death Note
it is a japanese novel which turned to an Anime (Tv Show)
Simply it says' there was a Note which it is called Death Note dropped from the Shinigami word to the Human world
then a human cuaght this Note...and he discovered that if he writes any name the person who was meant will Die in a 40 sec by a heart attack or he can detrmine how he may die by writing the detials in the death note within 6 min and 4 sec
Shinigami like to eat apples that was mentioned in the novel and the shinigami must follow the death note holder untill he die or killed
because the shinigami lost it in this human word
then it began this legend by somone called lately Kera, , (Kera= Killer)
Kera was so smart by using this death note to exterminate the bad guys around the world
and he thought he will rule this world and he'll play the role of the god
then the governments notice that was sometthing wrong
the prisoners die without wornings by a heart attack
they thought about a proffessional killer may exist
then a detective called L, , the most intelegent guy, , , proved that was a killer called Kera existed
by a restricted TV show, , in a regoin in japan, this TV show was daring to Kera. kera watched the show then he killed the person who was talking in live and then L started to search about Kera
at the End if the death note holder entend to die the shinigami will write his name on the Death note
this is a fiction novel which get the millions admires
# one day I thought about the same idea of killing the vaillains around on the earth
so I wrote it to see how bad if I had this power
Very, Very good. I agree with Michelle....A little more detail.... But other than that... I like thanks for sharing -Brie
I LIKED IT BUT JUST GIVE MORE DETAIL TO THE THINGS YOUR TALKING ABOUT.... MAKE THE READERS WANT TO KNOW MORE ABOUT YOUR POEM OR STORY.......LIKE THEY SAY 'LEAVE THEM IN SESPENSE'
i like how you used other cultural things in poems and gave it meaning i also like the subject you chose and the grammar and structure was well thought of
I liked it but there were a couple word mistakes you should type it on microsoft then copy then paste on this site
It is a very nice poem, tht has many meanings, Keep it up, and i hope for u a good luck
yeah death note is manga....right? well anyway very powerful......but remember we arent the ones who choose our destiny. well.................. i kept reading it and you did good in that sense. thanks for sharing! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! 9.....
You appear to be very young, and the theme here implies a very violent world, even though fictional, of which I don't approve. Also there is no poetic feeling, nor redeeeming virtue in it. Good poetry has to sing with a rhythm, if not rhyming. Yours has neither..
Now, it is awesome. Very good 10 from me You have alot of talent for your age Thanks for sharing -Brie
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Ummmmm It's good But needs more details to clarify the main thought of the poem The thoughts in the first part are kinda broken.The last part of the poem is much better than the first. But as a whole it is Good ^_^