Realized Poem by Zero CoDe


Rating: 3.4

let me think about that moment
let me realize every move I did it
it happened so slow
as feathers blow
you can see every move
and its dance on the air door
I saw a fallen apple and I caught it.
there is only one thing I can take it
there are a lot to think about them
there are many I have to change them

taking their life
and I will rule this World
and there will be
no vaillians living around

I Raised my hand trying to write
my name in the Damn Death Note

a lot of things happened and eclipsced
a broken bridge showed up with ropes flaccid
people appeared to let me fall
at this wide creepy valley hole
I gave up
there was no choice
you can't deter them away
there was no time to write their names

a freeky smile
from the shinigami
then I knew this is the Time
my legend is becoming so ugly
I killed many people in the name
of the god who Justifies

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Shinigami = it is a japanese word I'm not sure of its spelling
it means the god of Death, , , or what we call it as the angle of Death

the name of the novel which I borrowed from it some ideas is Death Note
it is a japanese novel which turned to an Anime (Tv Show)

Simply it says' there was a Note which it is called Death Note dropped from the Shinigami word to the Human world
then a human cuaght this Note...and he discovered that if he writes any name the person who was meant will Die in a 40 sec by a heart attack or he can detrmine how he may die by writing the detials in the death note within 6 min and 4 sec
Shinigami like to eat apples that was mentioned in the novel and the shinigami must follow the death note holder untill he die or killed
because the shinigami lost it in this human word

then it began this legend by somone called lately Kera, , (Kera= Killer)

Kera was so smart by using this death note to exterminate the bad guys around the world
and he thought he will rule this world and he'll play the role of the god

then the governments notice that was sometthing wrong
the prisoners die without wornings by a heart attack

they thought about a proffessional killer may exist

then a detective called L, , the most intelegent guy, , , proved that was a killer called Kera existed
by a restricted TV show, , in a regoin in japan, this TV show was daring to Kera. kera watched the show then he killed the person who was talking in live and then L started to search about Kera

at the End if the death note holder entend to die the shinigami will write his name on the Death note

this is a fiction novel which get the millions admires

# one day I thought about the same idea of killing the vaillains around on the earth

so I wrote it to see how bad if I had this power

Naidz Ladia 14 December 2008

i like the honesty u want to express in here..if i were to be asked, this is a very beautifl one.

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Brianna Trombley 14 December 2008

very nice write, i like how you start out with a rhyming pattern and then slowly drift into your own poetic style, it allows you to express yourself very nicely,

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Miguel Maria 14 December 2008

i like the series and i like your work

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Loyd C Taylor Sr 14 December 2008

Hello Poet. I would only suggest to get a good spelling check program and make sure each piece is checked before posting, Feathers is just one misspelled word for example. I would suggest some punctuation as well to help keep the flow. It is an interesting read. Good luck, Loyd

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Jacob Gifford 15 December 2008

I like it, it is well spoken

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Jacob Gifford 11 March 2009

I liked it but there were a couple word mistakes you should type it on microsoft then copy then paste on this site

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Juba Adolfo 16 December 2008

It is a very nice poem, tht has many meanings, Keep it up, and i hope for u a good luck

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brittany 16 December 2008

yeah death note is manga....right? well anyway very powerful......but remember we arent the ones who choose our destiny. well.................. i kept reading it and you did good in that sense. thanks for sharing! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! 9.....

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Fred Babbin 15 December 2008

You appear to be very young, and the theme here implies a very violent world, even though fictional, of which I don't approve. Also there is no poetic feeling, nor redeeeming virtue in it. Good poetry has to sing with a rhythm, if not rhyming. Yours has neither..

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Now, it is awesome. Very good 10 from me You have alot of talent for your age Thanks for sharing -Brie

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