Annette Aitken

Gold Star - 23,620 Points (1964 / Dublin)

Slipping Mask... - Poem by Annette Aitken

Slipping Mask

The mask is slipping
this front I bare,
for nothing
stays buried forever.
A companion of complete wrongness
of dynamic situations or
negative thinking.
Like something reflecting my darkness.
I'm not so much doing this to you,
I'm doing it for myself.
To leave the pain behind
where innocence was marred,
tieing up the loose ends.

So new life can begin again.



Topic(s) of this poem: life

Comments about Slipping Mask... by Annette Aitken

  • Terry CraddockTerry Craddock (11/18/2018 5:34:00 AM)

    I love the first 6 lines, evoking a sensual mystic appeal, in my mind I added 'In the current lure at the river's edge' the setting is the magic transition between day and night, the contrast from rippling sunlight on the water to the magic of full moonlight or shades of moonlight in the night. Sirens, some nature settings, always have the potential to swallow romantics whole in the dancing moonlight shadows of the night. (Report)Reply

    0 person liked.
    0 person did not like.
  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (4/14/2018 3:52:00 PM)

    (continued) ...oh, i see i commented on tieing almost a year ago. this time i'll say, as well, that i think this is a fine poem, one of the best (of yours) that i've read. heck, one of the best i've read from anyone; one of 'them'. to MyPoemList. R U still writing, working for money, AND helping a relative (i think) , AND babysitting! ? ? wait! you don't have time to answer me. bri :) (Report)Reply

    0 person liked.
    0 person did not like.
  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (4/14/2018 3:48:00 PM)

    i DID wonder about tieing vs what i'm used to, tying. i did some online research and came up with some comments, among which is According to the Wiktionary, tieing is an alternate spelling for the present participle of tie (tying) . I've seen it used in a 70s comic book, but nowhere else, so I guess it's a little uncommon. My question is if this alternate spelling is considered less correct, formal, prestigious or academical. (to continue) .. (Report)Reply

    0 person liked.
    0 person did not like.
  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (7/4/2017 7:22:00 PM)

    yes, i know. to tie is to bind something; i like bondage! but i think you want: 'tying'. ;) :)

    AA, , let me know when you next plan to bear your...oops! .....bare your front! ! i'll be there
    with my camera.

    bri :)

    0 person liked.
    0 person did not like.
  • Edward Kofi LouisEdward Kofi Louis (2/25/2017 2:18:00 PM)

    Wrongness! Thanks for sharing. (Report)Reply

    0 person liked.
    0 person did not like.
  • Pamela SinicropePamela Sinicrope (2/24/2017 3:38:00 PM)

    I like the idea of letting go of a mask, ill-fitting...nothing stays buried can find themselves again...even after complete wrongness. (Report)Reply

    0 person liked.
    0 person did not like.
  • Tom Billsborough (2/14/2017 10:30:00 AM)

    It's good to shed the old skin and refresh your life. A very interesting poem, Annette. (Report)Reply

    1 person liked.
    0 person did not like.
Read all 7 comments »

Read this poem in other languages

This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.

I would like to translate this poem »

word flags

Poem Submitted: Tuesday, February 14, 2017

Poem Edited: Tuesday, February 14, 2017

[Report Error]