explain to me why I'm still alive
after all I've done i think its time to die
I've caused agony and misery
my life is pointless cant you see
I'm so cold keep your hand in mine
I'm so cold keep your fear in mine
all I want to do is lye down and die
just let this torture called life end
lying here I deserve to die
just shows you how useless I really am huh
I'm so cold
oh so cold
wow, that's really all I can say, it's a really good poem. A ten out of ten from me! ! !
An outburst of explosive feeling of extreme frustation written in a nice possible way.
i liked it, however a sad message. i'm sorry you feel this way
Great poem, sad feeling. I think you should do a spell check when you write you poems but overall its a really good and sad. I am just wondering have you shown your friend yet?
Sad yes it is. Um a note is that you need to kind of work on your spelling. It makes the poem better to have good spelling. Really nice poem though. I wonder if you showed this poem to your friend yet.... 10/10 -Tyease
This is a good poem but you are missing key elements and simple basics, just from reading it the first time is very weak, but it has a good chance of growing...first of all spelling, this is a very strong poem because of the word use, if you don't spell the words correctly then the words lose the meaning and strength and becomes weak. second is punctuation, in the first line you ask a question, the first line is the most important and by asking a question you invite the reader in, you invite them, but if you don't put a question mark then it confuses the reader and instead of paying attention to the words and the sentences they look for other errors and the poem loses more strength. this is a good poem but it is very weak...this poem needs a lot of work. the words are powerful coming from such a young person but don't let your age hold you back, I see lots of potential and I know that you will be a good poet one day, you are better than i was at your age. also please don't take my comments to the heart i don't mean to be rude or offend, I want you to learn and grow from what i have to say, you are very talented and have much to learn. I will be keeping my eye on you and am looking forward to more of your poetry, keep on writing and don't be afraid to write the truth or explore.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
nice well written <3 meaningful... keep it up