When two spouses should share responsibility,
but one does the work of not 1 or 2, but 3....,
the "one" someday may finally realize....
it's time to turn around & open eyes,
and seek a street with two-way flow,
to buck the one-way traffic and then go...
cruising down a two-way street zoom zoom,
to find a more suitable partner, bride, or groom!
(February...18th.....2019)
Brilliant poem, well worded, only there must be an " a" in the first line final stanza: NOT and seek a street with two-way flow, BUT and seek a street with a two-way flow, About the last line in the second and final stanza: to find a more suitable partner, bride, or groom! You must erase that GROOM, that suits only when you are gay. You can alter that like this: erase GROOM, add ZOOM.
Sylvia, your suggestions are appreciated, but not taken. ha ha. " a" is NOT required (in my opinion) but i'd NOT say using " a" is incorrect. Also, Groom is just fine. i've not specified the gender of " one" & gay marriage is fine with me anyway; a loving LGBT couple is better than a straight/heterosexual couple which is not happy/loving. bri :)
Good poem thanks for sharing Bri. Your relationship poems are often humorous (not this one though) yet deal effectively with a very important topic. However I must say walking out is just one way of dealing with it among many others. From some women’s point of view training of other half never ends...
sounds like one of those life lessons most of us learn a little too late. Well expressed. tfs
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Like this: to find a more suitable partner, bride, or....zoom! Just a proposal from my side to alter that word GROOM into ZOOM Thank YOU dear Bri. I enjoy always when I read your poem. Only time-lack is my greatest enemy, Bri. Know that I know this poem is an Answer To A Message from a PH friend.