A Lonely Cloud.....[nature Observation; Humor] Poem by Bri Edwards
A Lonely Cloud.....[nature Observation; Humor]
I saw a lonely cloud one day.
It looked small beyond the Bay.
I tried to find a second and failed,
even though I looked each way.
Think of it! A single cloud.
Its loneliness spoke to me aloud.
I wonder how it felt up there.
Was it very proud?
A rarity I think it was;
like an active bee with no buzz;
like a single potato chip;
like a peach skin with no fuzz.
Like one firefighter at a fire;
a solitary pigeon on a wire;
a Facebook member with no 'friend';
a single member in a choir.
It's like an Easter basket with one egg;
a basketball star with one leg;
me with just one word to say;
a fraternity party with just one keg.
I guess you've come to realize by now
that when I saw that cloud I thought 'Wow! '.
If I'd been Adam, with Eve at my side,
to that small distant cloud I might bow.
(August 2012)
I hope one day I can write poetry just like you. I can't imagine being that good.
You have already demonstrated a fine young poetic talent from what I've read so far. I happened to notice (in 'Notifications' section of PH) that you'd visited my 'cloud'. thanks.
If you can imagine it, perhaps someday you will achieve that goal, or another goal as, or MORE worthy, like always being nice to people. : ) bri
Nice cadence to the lines. Enjoyable images with ironic feeling to them.
I really WANT TO ALTER THE POEM'S TITLE. THIS POEM HAS NO HUMOR FOR ME NOW. I now say it is SERIOUS, BUT I can't figure out the edit procedure. Rats! bri
Like one Ice cream cone in two hands.... Great humor. This poem is even better than 'My Ingles Sucks'
This is a masterpiece, brilliantly crafted. I love the way you pen this piece. If Loneliness were a person, I pity how she is all by herself.
When I browse your poems, I just stop at this poem to read it again.
A cloud floating so high, but lonely.He may be proud, but can never be happy as he has nobody to share happiness.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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I'm growing through the peom again, and am lost in this poem, and all I can say again is; Wow! Kingfemi