Suddenly Poem by Chris G. Vaillancourt

Suddenly

Rating: 4.9


Suddenly I am thrown and tossed,
...................broken and fixed.
Discontent. Unhappy.
Content. Happy.
Watching cars sit at the curb.
Pretending they are all mine.

And if they were, I'd drive them
..................to many empty parking lots.
Fill up the spaces.
Fill up the spaces.
Desert them.
Collect them later and
.................set them on fire.
But I know this is not real.
My lighter does not even have fuel.

Ah, but perhaps the store
................is still open?

Suddenly I am equally unaware
..................of squalid conditions
............................and
.......................equally perverse
..............................attentions...
Open and shut.
Shut and open.

Good friends always help
................their friends to cry.

Sunday, May 4, 2014
Topic(s) of this poem: life
COMMENTS OF THE POEM

Good friends always help... nice poem come to rescue pay the due ad review if you are in trouble....10

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Poetheart Morgan 07 May 2014

Hello Poet our mind is a trap.... we think too much and we gets lost in it.... and it does not give us all the answers... feel your heart and dispense your objectivity... Open and shut your feelings....I love it...

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Valsa George 06 May 2014

Human mind is so erratic... Sudden is the change of mood and there is a lot of incongruity to be percieved in our thoughts as well as in life.... The last lines are a shocking revelation.... we all experience it one time or the other.... When friends quicken the flow of tears... It is unbearable and we are bewildered by the antagonism of life.... A great write! !

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Susan Lacovara 05 May 2014

Your write rattles on, like a train chugging down the winding track.....a mind spilling fragments...click, clack, clack! I loved it's intensity of how the mind works! And your last line should be applauded, devices! PEACE

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Ramesh Rai 05 May 2014

Good friends always help ................their friends to cry. Agreed upto some extent. But if it happens so life is lost. A good friend is a good foe if accepted and practically happens so except in rare cases due to which the life is continuing. I regard your emotions and thoughts.

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Cainneach Rua 14 March 2023

Broken and fixed - this was very powerful. And the last two lines I loved. s

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Lyn Paul 27 May 2014

Appreciate the pauses in this great write, can capture the mood. Thank you

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Sam Smith 14 May 2014

strong feelings for such a piro soul.

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Matthias Pantaleon 09 May 2014

Good friend always help their friends to cry Hmmm, I love the sound of that phrase. Got me thinking. Short yet fulll of life. Beautifully penned

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Khairul Ahsan 08 May 2014

The abrupt swings of mind and mood have been portrayed well in this poem. An excellent work! I may be wrong, but I would like to interpret the last two lines of your poem differently from some of the poets who commented. I would like to think that you meant good friends play a cathartic role, by helping the afflicted to cry and relieve him, to some extent at least, of the grief or sorrow or void feelings.

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